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"Chris?"2
She turned around to look at him. He caught his breath as she questioned him with the brilliant blue of her eyes. She had dressed up, her pale yellow dress was being teased by the hurricane force gale that was moving in from the Atlantic.3
She looked good; it was hard for him to believe she had been his for this long and she kept trying to assure him that she wasn't leaving. When she realized he was distracted, she prompted him, "Yes?"4
He blinked and shook his head as if to clear it. "a... ah... I..." he stammered. 5
She rolled her eyes and turned back away from him, preparing to walk away again.6
"I care about you, Chris," he whispered into the darkness.7
She sniffled, a dry laugh escaped her throat. "So I've heard, but I haven't seen."8
"You scare me, Chris." He sighed and moved towards her. "What you make me feel scares me."9
"I'm sorry, Richard," she whispered. She tried to walk away from him, but instead she reached her arm out to lean against the wall as she whimpered.10
"Chris?" he asked, reaching her, his voice soft.11
She turned into him as she collapsed, losing her firm hold on consciousness.12
Author notes
I realize I'm repetitive. If you lived the dreams I have, you'd be repetitive too. He haunts me and this scene haunts me everyday, you'd think it'd go away after a few weeks of seeing it and writing it. But it's one of those things that I'm afraid's going to happen to me at school, but if it does, I hope he's there to catch my fall.
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It's very short =/
It had a good flow but I feel like it's missing something...I don't know what but there's just something missing.
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excellent
god words ...excellent flow of emotion.....well written.....Buchan -
that was beautiful.
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wow. i'm speechless.
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