The Vampire Next Door

Victims pleading for their lifes is a situation that seems to bore Lukice to tears. Fear is a dull emotion for a vampire. It's the same routine each day. Stalk, shock, then devour their prey. Once overwhelming as a child, this disease became anything but an unique one.1

Lukice wanted something more than the power of fright. He longed for the goddess of his afterlife. One who welcomed him to a new spontaneous world of twist and turning love.2

She came on a Wednesday. Her name was Astrid and she was his.. or so he wanted. Jumping out of a black Honda Civic, she stared up at her new home glaring at the sight of it. Another year, another house. Her mom was in the navy and bounced the family from one city to another frequently.3

Astrid grabbed all of her things out of the Yamaha in one trip, a bag of clothes and comics. Half the way up the walkway she noticed the house in front of theirs by seeing it in her living room window's reflection. Astrid's eyes focus on the home's top story, seeing a teenage man standing there staring at her. Lukice eyes widened and he flew to the floor. All he was thinking was, "Her eyes were amazing." He didn't come to realization that Astrid might come to his house until he heard the door ring. Shocked, but gathering himself, Lukice stumbled to the door. "W-who is it?" He said in a rather scratchy voice. "Your new next door neighbor." He threw open the door making Astrid scream.4

"Oh my god, you scared me. What they hell is wrong with you?"5

"I'm sorry, just a bit tired and edgy, would you like to come in. What did you say your name was?"6

"I didn't, I'm Astrid. You're Lukice right?" His brain culapsed.7

"You know my name?"8

"Sure, when I said to one of my friends that I was moving here, she told me about a strange dark serial killer across the street." She giggled.9

"What's so funny?" Said Lukice.10

"You don't seem threatening. Kind of nerdy actually."11

"Gee thanks."12

"Oh, I didn't mean that to be insulting."13

"What being called a nerd is a good thing?"14

"Well, sort of. Do you know the band Weezer? They're nerdy and cool."15

"Who?"16

"Hello? Weezer? You do know what music is, don't you?"17

"I don't listen to it." He shrugged.18

"HUH? Music is the one thing that influences a teenagers life."19

"Well, fun chatting with you. Please leave. I have other things to attend to." Lukice started to walk away.20

"What? Like drinking blood?"21

He stops.22

"I heard that rumor to. Which one is true?"23

He wanted to say neither. But when you looked at her, Lukice saw wonder in her eyes that made Astrid seem understanding to any explanation he would give.24

"The second one." He murmured.25

"Really?"26

"Nah, I just love people believing I suck lives out of the innocent."27

"I would like people thinking that. Then they wouldn't come near and bother me. Well okay, if you're a real vampire, why haven't you bit me yet?"28

"I'm full."29

"That's funny, I read monster comics all the time and they say that vampires can't deny easy to get to blood." Astrid smiled.30

"You seem like you want me to bite you."31

"Well, how else are you going to prove it?"32

"I can't."33

"Because you're not a-"34

"You're to perfect." The words out of Lukice's mouth stunned both of them. "Astrid, listen to me. I don't want to hurt you. A vampire's laugh toward a victim's fear can destroy your heart, even if it's already dead inside. I can't destroy you. Go home."35

"But."36

"GO!"37

THE END..?

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  • Prodigious.Mirth
    July 23, 2008
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    There was an interesting concept behind it and it made for interesting fiction. i will admit I love vampires and have a fetish for biting but would of loved to see of a more romatic element in the piece. i think it has potential and want more.

    good luck
    thanks for entering
    blair

  • ExpectingMommy18
    July 22, 2008

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    I really liked this story but please add more,if you need time for the contest just let me know I just want to know more about this story it intrigued me

  • sugarrrainbow
    July 18, 2008

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    Oooooooooohh, I would like more please!
    Very interesting plot line, the beginning was very good, however it kind of got choppy at the end.
    Wonderful!


  • Midnight-Engaged
    July 16, 2008
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    Not quite what I was looking for and you do have a few errors in it. This also has no romantic influences in it whatsoever....nothing. It was pretty good for a vampire story, but unless you plan on making more parts, then it doesn't fit to be romance. Sorry.

  • darkheart
    July 16, 2008

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    pretty cool

    i like vampire stories i have like 3 already i lke how in the begining it like just thoughts then like peron gets what they want


    • KristyBrainsikk
      July 16, 2008
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      huh? explain the last sentence you said.

      • darkheart
        July 16, 2008
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        sry im kinda tired right now i was up all night playin resedent evil 4

        basickly how the story ends up playing out


        • KristyBrainsikk
          July 16, 2008
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          But no one gets what they want. He wants her and she wants death. Neither got their dream ending.

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