Poem


GUYZ I WROTE THIZ ABOUT WHEN I WAS 12 SO PLEASE DONT BE HARSH LOLZ!1


As delighted as I am right now,
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I want to scream and yell my heart out,
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and sing a happy song on a hot summer day,
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everything has turned out okay,
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cant wait till the next daylight that will surely brighten my day,
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I want to see the bright yellow sun come out in the morning,
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and here the birds shirping outside the window of my room,
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As delighted as I am right now,
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I'de just like to say thank you to God for these happy days.
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My name is Lisbet I'm 14 comment please

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  • aly96522
    July 22
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    haha i liked it, it was good


  • heartfullofvenom
    July 16
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    "and here the birds shirping outside".... it should be "hear" instead of "here".
    And..."I'de just like to say" should be "I'd" so theres really no need for the "e".

    other then that it was pretty swell,I thought your last line was very cute.

    [:

  • zoralielda
    July 16
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    I am not being harsh...lolz
    This is good.


    • lisbet5
      July 16
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      thank you i was just two years ago when i wrote it. lolz