Black and White chapt 9

Crystel’s slept deeply that night. It would seem that nothing should wake her. The trees above her, as threatening as they may have appeared, were calm, and swayed gently in the wind, pattering together almost as if in song. The ground, as green and undesirable it may have felt as they had trotted on it just hours before, served as a giant cushion, letting her sink comfortably into it. The wind would spin and dance, keeping the forest from getting too hot, while the leaves above them seemed to hold in just enough of the sun from the day before’s heat for it to get too cold. 1

But even so, Crystel managed to pull awake from her deep comfortable sleep to the darkness the dead fire Jeff had made hours before had left around her that seemed to blind her completely to the peaceful surroundings. And at first, like what often happens to the best of us as we rise from a deep slumber to a world seemingly forgotten, Crystel forgot completely and utterly where it was she was lying. In fact at that unfortunate moment she had completely forgotten Mirindia, and her quest to destroy the witch. She forgot about Isaac and Jeff, and every other encounter that had occurred. So you can imagine how startled she was as she reached for her lamp in the pitch darkness not only to find it missing but in its place her hand fell upon the rough bark from the tree next to her.2

Crystel’s eyes widened and she bolted up; sleep still fogging up her mind. ‘Where am I?’ she thought fearfully. She felt around, feeling the mossy ground, then the tree trunk again to make sure it was not just her imagination. When her surroundings were confirmed, the first thoughts that entered her mind were, abducted, kidnapped, and captured. These thoughts made her heart begin to thump, and quickly, but quietly, she stumbled to her feet, only able to think about getting away. But as she ran, blood began to properly flow to her mind once again, and the cool wind woke her up from her conscience sleep. Suddenly, she remembered everything and when reality finally returned to her, her face grew hot and she swung quickly around to try and get back before any one noticed her absence and she would be forced to mutter a horribly embarrassing explanation. But as she swung around she felt her foot hook itself on a protruding root and in one horrible moment she felt it twist around sending excruciating pain through her ankle. The muscles seemed to wrench around tearing them in half. And a second later, she found herself laying on the now not so comfortable ground clutching her throbbing ankle, mind spinning in thoughtless agony.3

Jeff, meanwhile, was torn from his sleep hearing loud earsplitting screams. He looked up and saw Crystel not laying where he had left her. His mind began to spin in a minor panic as he quickly jumped to his feet and ran as fast as he could to where he heard her shrieking, He got there in what felt to him like hours, as each cry seemed to send daggers through his chest and head. When he got there he saw Crystel sprawled on the ground face contorted with pain, ankle extremely bloated, and tears streaming down her face. 4

He quickly dropped on the ground next to her, heart beating rapidly trying to think of what he was supposed to do. “C-Crystel,” He stammered, “L-lass, what happened,”5

“I-it’s b-broken” She sobbed, still cling to her over-sized ankle, “I- I b-broke it!”6

“No, no lass, it’s not broken,” He said trying to be reassuring, but hardly knowing what he was talking about himself, “If it was broken it would be twisted around or something. I think it’s just-“ He stopped, and inspected her ankle, he knew what it was, he had seen that kind of injury before, lots of time, “I-it’s just a sprain, that’s all.”7

“J-Jeff,” Crystel cried, “I-It h-hurts, it h-hurts r-really, r-really b-bad. I-I think it’s B-broken. I-I r-really d-do.”8

“It may feel that way but, d-don’t worry lass, I’ll fix it,” although he had no idea ho to, he suddenly really wished he hadn’t promised that.”9

“J-Jeff,” Crystel said. He could tell she was attempting to get a hold of herself, “Y-you need to bring me back to where we camped.10

Jeff looked down at her suddenly feeling extremely weak all over, “You mean I need to carry you?” He muttered nervously under his breath. Crystel didn’t hear him, but Jeff knew that was exactly what she meant. Gingerly, he reached towards her, trying to ignore her pain-filled sobs. As he lifted her up, her screams got louder for a moment as she told him to be gentle, but soon after, he found himself standing with her in arms. She was clinging to his shirt as though her life depended on it, crying her eyes out into his shoulder. Slowly, he began to make his way the way he came, carrying her as if she were made of thin glass. The beautiful creature he had only recently been barley bold enough to look in then way of, he now had pressed against his chest. 11

They approached the camp soon, and Jeff quickly built up the fire again. Isaac woke up a few minutes after the fire had started and Crystel had calmed down a little. Jeff was about to make a smart remark about it but stopped himself when he saw Crystel. 12

As the night drew on Crystel eventually calmed down enough to fall asleep, while Jeff and Isaac sat up by the camp fire. At first Isaac refused to talk, and when he did, he said so many thinks that Jeff could almost taste a nasty reply sitting temptingly at the end of his tongue. But somehow, Jeff always managed to swallow his pride, and in the end, Jeff was somehow forced to give in to the idea that they would keep moving. But there was one condition that Jeff would not budge at, and that was that it was not going to be Isaac, but Jeff who carries her.13

Jeff didn’t care how awkward it would be, For some reason, Crystel meant the world to him, and If she ever got hurt again, he thought that hew would die.14

As the night drew on, and Isaac fell back to sleep. Jeff stayed awake by Crystel’s side, swearing that she would never get hurt again, not even over his cold dead body.15

Author notes

I liked this chapter a lot. I have always enjoyed Crystel/Jeff moments and this is my first one. Tell me what you think.

Also, I have never sprained my ankle. I had to ask my cousin and Grandmother. if anyone who reads this has sprained their ankle, tell me if I did well in describing what it was like. But, this may be a short chapter, and I was rushed at the end because it was dinner, then dessert, then we all played cards and all the while I'm trying to type. So tell me please if my ending is bad. Please and thank you. ^_^

Just, what do you think? I guess.

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  • Valkyrie silver member
    July 26

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    p1 Crystel slept
    should = could
    day before's heat = heat of the day before/yesterday's heat

    p2 I think there should be a . after darkness

    p5 needs a ?

    p9 ho to = how to

    aww, it's so sweeeeet, he wuvs her!

    p11 barley = barely
    look in then way of = ? look at, maybe?

    p13 thinks = things
    they aren't doing anything for that ankle. If anything, they should wrap it tightly with some long strip of cloth so she doesn't keep twisting it in her sleep or whatnot. Prop it up on a rolled cloak or her pack, etc Maybe they don't know what to do, but you can have Crystel know, since she's probably seen Ace bandages at her old home and stuff.

    About the ankle thing, a sprain is actually damage to tendons and ligaments, not to muscles. Those things hold the muscles to the bones, or the bones to each other. Muscles are flexible enough that they wouldn't hurt when she twisted that puppy around, but tendons and ligaments aren't stretchy at all, by comparison. It would feel like a hot, burning line of pain across the spot where it twisted.

    If you want, you can add in a loud crack. That would make her think it's broken at first. But just like you can pop your knuckles, you can pop your ankles. There's little pockets that go 'crack' in them too. I do it all the time. And it doesn't hurt at all, but it sounds loud. It could just be from the angle her ankle twisted at.

    The attitude of Jeff seems pretty good here; he's very caring, but not sappy with extra mush.


    • heh, I may actually take out the whle sprang hing ll together here (I was thinking about it... wow, I have a lot of diting to do), anyway, I planned this to do somthing in prticular, that I then realized wasnt supposed o happen for some time. Anyway, I'm glad you liked it.

      lol! It is sooo funny thinking abut how Jef used to be. It was so sticky, goopy sweet it made ou want to puke. Then I realized "what am I doing!?! No slf respecting Goblin would do this!!!" so I stopped and sort f gae him a makeover. It seems I've been successful. ^_^or at least I'm heaing in the right direction. I'm happy you lked it.


  • Girl Anachronism
    July 18, 2008

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    I liked it a whole lot! There were few typos but I understand. Your family sounds a lot like mine. I think Jeff in absolutely adorable, though. I mean I know he is supposed to be big and scary and all but I just want to pinch his cheek like that annoying great aunt everyone has and always avoids at the family reunion. (Wow! Really long description there. Sorry.)

    Anyways, this chapter seemed a little shorter than the rest. Maybe it's just me. I liked the ending, though. He's really getting attached. Great job. Can't wait 'til the next chapter.

    • silent dances
      July 19, 2008
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      ^_^ I'm glad you liked it. You see, I will say it was a bit difficult to write because In my previous copies Jeff is Jest plain sappy. Seriously, it was awful. Now he's a lot different and a lot cooler. So I was trying not to make Jeff sappy in his sweet moment either.

      Yes this chapter was shorter. I didn't have much time and I was planning on another scene. I might go back and edit it today.

      • Girl Anachronism
        July 19, 2008
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        I understand completely. Character correctness and evolution is hard, especially after editing. That's part of the reason I try not to write long stories. And because I'm lazy. Heehee.

        Yay! Another scene. Can't wait.


  • Melissa Loves Jeffy
    July 16, 2008

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    YAY Crystal and Jeff moments!!! I love these! Haha I could picture him carrying her. There just so cute!


  • EphemeralStyle
    July 16, 2008

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    Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, so coot ^^ They're both so innocent and good-willed <3 You did describe the sprained-ankle-ness quite well I could imagine it completely. And I think the ending is fine, so dw. Keep it up, and I shall returnnnn.....

    Eph

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