Three for the arguments, and the emptiness of mind,
One for that unspeakable time.
One for for screwing them up,
One for meeting her, because now we are stuck.
One because I am bored,
One because I am being ignored.
Two for him and one for her,
One for when my vision was a blur.
One for when I stopped talking to my best friend.
Eight for when it all came to an end.
One for when they thought I was alright,
One for how lonely I was that night.
One because that sound made it seem okay.
One for wanting to run far far away.
One for what my mind is saying,
And two for all the things I do, beauty is the art of persuading.
Two for not feeling the same,
Four for playing games.
One final heart,for what they will soon do.
One, because these things I won't let myself come to.
did you catch on yet?
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Its a little hard to understand in some places. But besides that, it was a very good poem.
I would double-space the lines, it makes it easier to read.
I loved this line--->>>
One for when my vision was a blur.
That's my favorite line of the whole poem.
Great job. And looking forward to reading some more of your work,
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Ok. There were some parts that I got......and some parts that I didn't.
Ok.........let me start with this↓
It was yet another good poem. You write poems alot, don't you?
Well, your poems are some what better than mine. -sike-
I'm just messin' with ya! These poems of yours are interesting and unique.........
Did I say unique????? I must be on something.
Anyway, it was good. Keep it up.
P.S. My friend says you should stick to love poems. -don't listen to her. She's a bit
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♥ Nancy & Cresencia ♥
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!! Wow. This is great. The emotions are great and with each line you get the feeling of anger and desperation.
I usually don't go for "emo" pieces, but yours seem to enliven the feeling of it and the reasons behind it.
Yeah I think I get it. :[
.♥. Maureen .♥.
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