Excerpt from "Night's Romantic: Prologue"

I looked into his eyes, and I could not spot any venomous desire, but only love for me. Before I could hesitate and stop myself, my hands were around his neck. I closed my eyes, and my lips parted, now, tightly pressing against his. He had one hand around my waist, and another in my flaming red hair. He pulled me closer, and kissed me back with inhumane intensity. I could feel his soft, delicate, blood red lips against mine. He drew back to pause and look at me, and I did the same, looking into his eyes; and in an instant we were kissing each other again. As the night began to die, he stopped and looked at me. His gaze was full of longing, and before leaving he told me, “Just call my name and I will find you…and Rachel…”1

“Yes?” I softly replied, still in a trance.2

“I love you.” The words were drawn from his lips, and with a swish of his jet-black cloak, and the whipping of his long, silky hair that was darker than the night, he vanished, leaving behind a cloud of thin smoke.3

I was on tip-toe, beautifully pirouetting around the trees. The tingle of his lips had never left mine.

Author notes

For Tiger Lily's Contest.

1. Passionate kiss scene (only kissing, no extreme making out)
2. Involuntary (eg. your ex getting too friendly againts your will)*
3. First kiss (different from Passionate, as this is something the character has never felt before)**
4. Peck (describe to me the chemistry here more than the kiss itself)
5. Near kiss (about to happen, but then at the last second, something happens)***

I pick option 1. Thanks for the great contest, sis.

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  • Tiger-Lily
    August 23, 2008
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    Very well done, but I reall wanted more chemistry s opposed to action. This was a good entry however. XD

    -ht


  • NosferatuWoman
    July 30, 2008
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    Very well written.

  • Tiger-Lily
    July 12, 2008

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    Very good entry. I wish there had been more about the internal emotions, but you ended it off beautifully and this really did help!

    Thanks, lil bro!

    -HT

    PS: Long time no chat.