Chris sat on his couch and started watching T.V after he ate breakfast. 1
“Man I hate Saturday! All my friends are outside playing football while mom left me to baby sit my two years old sister.” Chris complained. 2
Jenny ran in to the living room screaming crazy. 3
“What’s wrong now Jenny?” Chris asked impatiently. 4
“BIG BROTHER PLAY DOLLS WITH ME! PLAY! PLAY!” Jenny shouted. 5
Chris placed both of his hand on his face and said, “Man I wish I wouldn’t be so bored right, I wish something fun could happen.” 6
Just after Chris finish the sentence, a magical cloud popped up from middle of no where. It turned from red ,to blue ,to purple, to orange, to green and back red again. Follow by was a big KABOOM! And out came a monkey in a top hat riding on a motorcycle. 7
“Hey kids! I’m Monkey in the Top Hat. Heard you guys were bored. So I came for a visit, a visit that you will never forget.” He jumped down the motorcycle. 8
Jenny went up to the Monkey in the Top Hat and patted him on the head, “Funny looking monkey play dolls with me.” 9
Chris could sense the monkey was up to no good. “Step away from the monkey Jenny.” Chris ordered. 10
Jenny wasn’t listening, she was to busy shaking the monkey back and forth. “Play monkey play!” Jenny kept shaking. 11
“Stop it! Stop it!” ordered Monkey in the Top Hat. 12
Jenny still did not listen, she kept shaking 13
Monkey in the Top Hat wasn’t some one that like getting pushed around. He pulled out a knife from his top hat and stabbed Jenny on the chest. 14
“ Brother Help...” said jenny in a very soft tuned voice as she slowly falling backward. 15
“NOOOO!” Chris Cried, dropping his knee to the ground, he looked at his dear sister. 16
“Never shake a monkey, or you will pay the price of blood shed,” The monkey dropped the knife on the ground. “Now it’s your turn son!” He grinned showing his shinny gold teeth, as he pulled out a Slime Buster out of his hat and aimed at Chris. 17
“Adios Kid,” the monkey shot at Chris 18
After that was a SPLAT, and Chris was stucked on the wall. 19
The Monkey went up to him and pulled out a grenade out of his hat 20
“Good Night kid” The monkey stucked the grenade in to Chris’s mouth 21
Chris Shook Head in disagreement 22
The monkey pulled the grenade. 23
“AAAAAAAAH,” Chris woke up on his bed. “Good thing it was only a dream,” he wiped the sweats of his face. 24
“Or is it?” the Monkey in the Top Hat opened the door. 25
“NOOOOOOOOOOOO!” Chris screamed in horror. 26
The End
Author notes
Thanks You for reading. I know this story is kinda weird and all, it took a while to write. Thanks to Colaca who made the contest for giving me this idea to write this story, and i hope you liked it.
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Good job, this made me laugh, very funny, keep up the good work=DD
mistakes...
paragraph 2, 'All my friends are outside playing foot ball while mom left' 'football' is one word, not two. there were a lot of small grammictal errors, so I didn't write them all down, but you should probably proof this.
Good luck in my contest,
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You're really good at writing all things weird and extraordinary...
Wow. This made me grin too.
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Yep thats what I am all about writing weird funny things. Thanks for commenting!
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someone had death on the mind X3 I love random storys like this good job!
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Glad you like it! and thanks for commenting on this.
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It's deffintely intersting. Kinda seems like the cat in the hat gone wrong. A little funny in some parts and random in others.
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Ha Ha, thanks for reading and commenting it. It sure did seem like the cat in the hat gone wrong lol.
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Well, all I can say is that it needs work. You need to work on your comma placement and sentence structure mainly. As for the story content itself, I'm sorry, but I didn't find it very funny or insane. Honestly, it was pretty cliche. Sorry.
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Well, as the contest starter, I would like to say you should read the contest, maybe that will explain some things.
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I was commenting on this story because it was placed in my contest also.
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My bad.
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Haha, that was so cute! Lovely little twists in there. When Jenny got stabbed I was like =O. It was soooooo enjoyable to read.
Just Awesome!!
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lol, its weird that girls actually like that part. Still thank you for reading it.
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OhmyGod. Poor little girl got stabbed by a monkey and she only wanted to play xD.
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Lol, thanks for reading.
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thats awesome lol i loved it
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Wow, amazing. I wanted humor and I definatly got humor from you. I could stop laughed at the end. My favourite bit was:
“AAAAAAAAH,” Chris woke up on his bed. “Good thing it was only a dream,” he wiped the sweats of his face.24
“Or is it?” the Monkey in the Top Hat opened the door.25
“NOOOOOOOOOOOO!” Chris screamed in horror.26
The End
Thank you for edning the competetion and it was obeying EVERY rule! You have a good chance with this.
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