Fallen Angel (Comeplete)

I Sat on the couch, staring outside where kids were playing loudly in the snow. I hated everyone becouse they got to have fun and I was stuck inside babysitting my dumb stepbrother bobby. I sipped my hot coco and almost cried. "Too hot!" I almost shouted, spitting out blood. I got up to the sink and poured it out with disgust, then a scream came from downstairs.1

Bobby! Then thought, he probably just saw a frickin spider. I sighed. Bobby wasn't aloud downstairs and he knew it. "Bobby! Get your a*ss up here now!" I yelled at the top of the stairs. I was slowly walking down the stairs, trying not to panic when he didn't answer. Something ran across the floor and I didn't think but ran instead. I tripped on a broken pipe on the ground, When I looked what was scurrying before I almost laughed when I saw bobby's cat "mouse".2

But then pain shot through me like a bullet. I groaned but ignored th throbbing pain and pick my self of the cold muddy ground. The reason there was mud on the ground was my father had this dumb idea that he could grow plants in the basement. But then I heard a voice and that shot me out of my thoughts. "Help me!Help me!" A cold rasp voice called out, like if it was mimicking someone or something.3

"Bobby? where are you?" I called back, trying to get my courage back. But as quickly as the voice came it was gone, leaving me alone in the darkness. A faint glow appeared like the voice did, out of thin air. "Hello? Is anyone here?" I shouted down the hall of the cold basement. But then the light vanished and it was dark again but I kept on walking.4

The voice came back but in a sweeter tone. The glow of blue and white was back and in front of me was some kind of...angel. An angel from god,Is what I thought but I was wrong, horribly wrong. "Your mine now, come bobby it's time for fun" The angel whispered in a really creepy voice to my stepbrother. The so called "Angel" didn't notice me behind him and slam his hand on the dirt, and the ground started to shake violently.5

Quickly a hole appeared and bobby fell in with a loud crack. "No!" I screamed, stepping forward. The "angel" turned spun around, glaring at me with his pure blood red eyes. "Where's my stepbrother?" I sobbed,stepping back again. "You don't need to worry, your brother is fine."The angel replied in that creepy voice again, "You look like someone I know." His voice lowered in a quieter tone but still extreme creepy level. "Oh trinity, it's you. Come here, it's me Milo. you still owe someone a kiss." The angel declared.6

"My name is not Trinity! It's Lizzy! And I thought you were an angel,Your not suppose to kill people but save them!" I screamed,Blinking away tears. "I'm a fallen angel, The angel of death." He hissed, now crawling closer to her. "No! where is my brother?Where damn it!" I screamed again,letting my tears flow. She was trying hard to get away from Milo but kept failing. "He's gone Trinity, and he's not coming back,It's just you and me." Milo said in "his voice" that sounded like...spider! Then at that moment I had a flashback of my past.7

My friend spider that I found on the play ground. He showed me and my other friends that was girls, cool stuff that his father did. His father did abortions and kept the babies instead of burying them. Then Spider wanted to do the same thing so when he showed the babies in the jars to me and my three other friends May,lee,and Missy. But then when he showed us this, he said he wanted to play doctor with us.8

Everyone looked at May first so he took her in a sound proof room. I knew something was wrong when I saw red blood pouring through the ground cracks and I cried out her name. I started for the door but then he came out and stabbed me in the chest. We all ran into the forest but he got Lee and Missy and gave them they're... check ups too. I got out of the forest to a lake and swam Acrossed, but he couldn't swim so he drowned trying to get ME.9

After that I changed my name from Trinity to Lizzy. Finally I Exhaled. I don;t know how long I was holding mt breath, and I didn't care. "Leave me alone Milo! Please! I don't I understand why you want me!" I sobbed hard. "Oh trinity you will have the same fate as your friends did seven years ago!" He demanded, Growing more closer to me. "Please spider No." I cried, more tears filled my brown plain eyes.10

I finally got up and ran to the hole where I found bobby perfectly fine. "Lizzy Please help me,help me!!" He yelped. "Ah Ah Ah,Trinity now I'm mad and you know how I get when I'm mad." Milo demanded,pulling out the same knife from that horrible night at his house in that check up room and put it to to my thought. "Leave her alone!" A voice called out in anger Behind Milo. "Paul!" I sobbed. "Who's your friend trinity? Someone else for me to play with?" Milo asked, shoving me in to the pit with bobby.11

I hit the ground hard and felt my leg crack. I screamed out in pain and I could tell Milo loved it. "Run paul! Run!" I screamed finally but it was to late. Milo was kicking his *bunny* and was stabbing him repeatedly. "Stop Milo please just stop!" I screamed on the top of my lungs. "Oh no no no! I'm not done checking up on him, there is something wrong with him don't worry tour turn is next." Milo tisked on the edge of his tounge.12

"Your right there is something wrong with your brain" Paul yelled, finally getting away from Milo. "Who is Trinity?" Bobby asked out loud, looking at me. Milo's rusted up knife flew out of his hand and in to the hole. It slashed in to my side and bright red blood started to spill out. "Ah oh! Someone's got a boo boo! , I'm coming Trinity!" Milo remarked, starting to drag his way to the hole to join us.13

"I don't think so!" Paul yelled, grabbing him by the leg. Bobby finally got out of the hole and dragged Paul up the stairs, going to get help. "Oh trinity! Now we are together and your friends are here too!" Milo laughed, dropping May,lee and Missy's dead rotting bodies in the hole with me. "No No No! Please god no!" I sobbed hopelessly, looking at them. Milo was next to me in a flash, Pressing his cold lips to my cheek.14

I shook my head back and forth slowly, I closed her eyes trying to get the image of my old friends rotting bodies. But then his hand grabbed my wrist and her eyes shot open.I felt the ice cold blade slowly cutt across it and pain shot through quickly and I screamed. It was like never ending pain to me. Blood spilled out, ran down my wrist like a perfect line. I felt weak and I knew I was going to die. I could feel myself go paler and I knew I was going to bleed to death. Then suddenly Milo started to stab at my wrist, just stabbing at it like he was at paul when he was attacking him. I finally slipped off to the darkness. I was now set free from this curse, from this never ending nightmare. I knew Milo would do what he did to my friends but I didn't care anymore. I was free but how long will I feel like this, how long will my freedom last?15

The end
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Or is it???

Author notes

This was going to be the most boring day ever but of course I thought wrong. A long lost friend wants to pay her a visit and give her a free check up. Will her stepbrother and best guy friend pay the price instead or well she sacrifice herself. Or maybe they all are DOOMED! Milo is back for Trinity, her check up is finally here.

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  • 1: i absolutely love the title, 2: its a great story and 3: WELL DOONE!!!!!!!


  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    July 23, 2008

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    Thanks for your entry into the contest. A good and exciting story all the way through. There were a couple of confusing parts for me, but nothing that you won't cathc with future edits. For instance, I wasnt entirely clear how she got from inside to outside so quickly. I was only aware of outside by the mention of ground rather than floor. It was like a scene change that was difficult for my head to make because I didnt see it coming.

    I enjoyed reading it though. Best of luck in the contest.


  • StarOfDreams23
    July 22, 2008
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    does any one like it??


  • Darkhearted
    July 21, 2008
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    umm I don't wat to say...


  • Imaru-Mi-Amore
    July 13, 2008
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    This was really good!


  • StarOfDreams23
    July 12, 2008
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    Paul is her best guy friend. I meant it as a flash back but I keep messing up on her and me sorry! lol


  • Bloody-Ink gold member
    July 12, 2008
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    oops forgot smilies!

  • Bloody-Ink gold member
    July 12, 2008

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    Ooh ooh!! That was a great story!! I loved it!! Being honest, I was confused at a few parts. From where you say "Her friend Spider that she found on the playground...to...but he couldn't swim so he drown trying to get me. It seemed like you went from first person to omniscient. Or was it some kind of flashback? A few spelling probs but thats all! Other than that little part I loved it!! Please write more!! I like the Spider character! Oh, and who is Paul?


  • StarOfDreams23
    July 12, 2008
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    Yes I finished this story but should I write a 2nd book of not?

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