Silent Radio Murders1
By Andy Stephenson and Geri Fitzsimmons2
Chapter sixteen3
The chinos and navy jacket with the open collar white dress shirt made a rather nondescript figure out of the short blond Dick-two. Mike Tamanio entered Hal Goodwin’s place of employment a few minutes after he noted Goodwin’s exit for lunch. .4
Requesting the store manager, he was escorted by another clerk to a rear office neatly hidden by shelves of stacked merchandise. Using a phony business card embossed with a logo from a national bank, a quick handshake accompanied by an exchange of names and Tominio’s swift palming with the phony ID, and the two men settled down to talk.5
“We would appreciate your using some discretion in disclosing this conversation. It is our bank’s responsibility to provided certain founding through Government secured loans. Mr. Goodwin is seeking to purchase a condo on the Upper East Side. So we are required to do some background checks.”6
“No problem.” The young man behind the big desk didn’t look old enough to the detective to manage a playground. Still, the habit of promoting low-level management within nationwide companies for the financial benefits was well established. “Hal’s been with us for four years,” the manager said. “Always been dependable. Gives his best to the company,” sounded like rhetoric. 7
Tomanio guessed the fellow was probably Hal’s drinking buddy. The next spiel that followed his question, “I understand Mr. Goodwin is in a stable relationship with a young lady?” convinced him.8
“Oh yes, Hal and Michelle have been together probably a year or better.” 9
Loyalty was a good thing, Tomanio thought, but when you infused it with obvious lies you looked stupider than you where. Hal’s boss had to know Michelle was dead. If by no other means, Goodwin would have told him. Still, Tomanio played the liar’s game, which had become a joint endeavourer.10
Although the manager agreed not to mention the visit to Goodwin, Tomanio knew damn well it was just another lie. The fellow would have Goodwin in his office the minute he stepped back in the store. Just as well, it would make Michelle’s boyfriend nervous, since it would occur to him he was being investigated and it wasn’t any bank.11
Tomanio vacated the store and causally walked into the deli were Goodwin was finishing up by paying his check and flirting with the waitress at the register. 12
He ordered a ham and Swiss on rye with potato wedges and a coffee to go. He carried his lunch back to his car. Taking a bite of the sandwich and sip of coffee to wash it down he dialed Detective Sergeant Brad Benson’s cell number.13
“Sarge, a couple things on Goodwin,” he said when Benson acknowledged the call. “His boss isn’t more than a year or two older. He’s one of his card-playing buddies. If I was in the top management of their company I’d keep my eye on the store manger—honesty is not an important trait to him.” 14
“What makes you think that?”15
“Guy started out with the usual bull. The printed responses that protect the company. Of course since they’re normally just written on a form they’re easy to carry off. When you have to put voice to them, they almost make you both laugh.16
“Then I brought up Goodwin’s personal relationships—Hal, my boy, according to his boss, apparently is going to marry our corpse.” Tamanio gave a gross sneer. “He also loves his mama and helps little old ladies across Broadway.”17
“So you may have blown your cover for nothing?”18
“Not really. Goodwin hasn’t made me. He’s going to be nervous, after his buddy tells him about my visit. Nervous guy’s make mistakes.”19
“Right. You get a picture of the manager?”20
“I’m an expert with a cell phone. I already sent it on so the other men can have it when they take over. And I borrowed a pen so Goodwin’s boss will be processed and found if he’s in the system.”21
“Anything else?”22
“Don’t know if it means anything, but Goodwin took the two weeks before the murder off. He had vacation time coming and told his boss he wanted to visit his family in Virginia. Gather he hadn’t been home in a few years.”23
“I’ll have it checked out.”24
Benson spun his chair around and slide it across the floor to reach Farley’s desk. He replaced his cell phone in its waist holder. “Tomanio,” he said, “has given us some work to do.”25
“Really. Like we don’t have enough.” Farley leaned forward “The computer hasn’t come up with any real similarities between the victims except for small builds—none over a hundred twenty. And the Crises Line—but then there are four who never called it or the radio station. Got five runners, but they didn’t run in the same area. Except for two none of the vics lived or worked in the same general area. Three were college girls who had nothing in common with Michelle.”26
“Time you and I started digging deeper into the other women’s personal relationships,” Benson said. “Tamanio picked up some stuff on Goodwin. There a chance he may have been out of the city when Michelle died.27
“Let’s put Cory on tracing Goodwin’s whereabouts for those two weeks. If we can positively clear him, we can use that manpower elsewhere.” 28
Farley stood and started towards the next room. Then as Benson followed, Farley said, “ Might want to put a trace on Mark Ghiel’s love interest?”29
“You don’t think this could be a woman?”30
“And why not? What would prevent a jealous, maybe psycho, smart lady lawyer from indulging in a bit of murder? While Cory’s at it we’ll have him run Bridgett O’Reilly though the system.” 31
It was a quarter passed four in the afternoon when Bridgett O’Reilly let herself quietly into the Condo. 32
She shushed a yowling Thomas by rushing for the kitchen with the cat following and impatiently rubbing against her navy slacks while she replenished his food and water supply. 33
Bridgett didn’t want to wake a sleeping Mark. She kicked off her heels and carried them into the dressing room. Nights off together were rare and she’d contemplated all day on how they would spend it. 34
Limited by one shower, she decided to make early use of it and be ready when Mark got up. She ran a light warm water flow, to prevent steaming up her hairstyle. Her vibrant curls had a tendency to frizz up when wet.35
Bridget’s slender build, topped by a cherub face cursed with a semicircle of pale tan freckles that skipped across the bridge of a slightly upturned nose, presented a problem. A strong willed, highly intelligent attorney, men just didn’t take her seriously on first contact. So while her ‘Orphan Annie’ appearance belied her thirty-five years, it irritated her sense of equality. 36
Mark Gheil was a unique surprise for Bridgett O’Reilly. She’d been rushing from the courthouse the morning they met. Her attention focused on something else, she shoved the heavy metal door right into his butt sending him to his knees on the platform. And then quickly back to his feet.37
“Son of a bitch! What the hell is your problem Lady!” His cheeks were reddened in anger. There was no silly grin on his growling mouth. His fists were clenched and he appeared ready to slug her.38
“Sorry,” she stammered. “I didn’t mean to…”39
“To cripple me? What the hell was your hurry, or do you just naturally shove people around?”40
Bridgett gabbed a packet of tissues from her pocket and still professing her embarrassment offered them up with the excuse. “I didn’t see you.”41
He ignored the offering and dusted at the soiled fabric on his knees with his palms while he barked, “Maybe that’s why the door has windows—you think?”42
“I’ll have your suit cleaned. I’m so sorry. You’re not hurt? I’ll give you legal advice for life—I’m an attorney.”43
He didn’t snicker; say ‘Yeah—right’ instead he grunted, “First bit of advice, how much do I sue you for?”44
“Thomas!” Bridgett stumbled on her long terry robe as the pesky cat pushed open the door into the bedroom. She fell against it and defeated her intentions of not waking Mark too early.45
Not waking him if he’d been there—only the bed was messed-up like she’d left it in the morning but empty.46
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A bit of editing would help along with opinions [Reward: double points]
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Hey
i really liked this
it was really imaginative
and there was alot of detail put into it
i loved how you wrote it
i cant wait to read more
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Well well well Our boy never came home hmm...trust a lawyer to meet a guy by running him over...Can't wait for more..Keep up the good work

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Terrific read with a lot of different action going on here, and a few embalishments on certain people. Mike is an intersting character. I think he has a lot of gall, a risk taker somewhat. I have picked up a few typo's.
1....Paragraph 6/line 1....'provide' not 'provided' plus 'funding' not 'founding'
2....paragraph 7/line 1....I think to make this easier to read, you should put a coma after 'detective'
3....paragraph 10/line 2....'were' not 'where'
4....paragraph 10/line 4....'endeavour' lose the er on the end.
5....paragraph 13/line 2....Put a coma between 'down' and 'he'
6....paragraph 16/line 1....coma after 'course.
line 2....coma after 'form'.
It would make easier to read.
7....How about some astericks after paragraph 24. There's a change in scene here.
8....paragraph 26/line 4....coma after 'two'
9....Atericks after paragraph 31. Another scene change.
You guys have been doing a lot of writing and probably need a bit of a break. I enjoyed this chapter very much and will continue to backcheck on my suspects now. I have two in mind, so i will be very busy going over the earlier chapters. Great stuff, guys.

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Good morning Eagle, as always your 'eagle' eye is much appreciated
. Finding those errors is a great help….
And it is an added bonus, knowing your are enjoying the story
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If you do want to make a guess who is the killer? at any time-- please IM me. We may have a surprise for you
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Just for your info--no one has been right yet.

Geri
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Thanks
How are you?
It looks like we have a lot of little mistakes to fix. Thanks for catching them.
Actually, I haven't written anything in about a week for this novel. Geri will be after me soon
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Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause.
Andy
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Very Good
Hi Geri,
This is a wonderful chapter here. I enjoyed reading it and the details were wonderful and amazing.
I did not get the last scence with the woman. Is she remembering what happened at the courthouse in the shower?
Lynn
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Morning Lynn, thanks for reading and commenting. We will have to give that ending a bit more.
I see where you ran into the problem, you did come out with the right conculsion but we like to make things easy for our readers--well, except when it comes to guessing the killer.
Geri
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'graph 6: founding should be funding?
'graph 10: where should be were
endeavourer should be endeavor (unless you prefer the UK spelling!
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Between 'graph 31 and 32 you gotta put a double paragraph break or something in there to let us know you're switching scenes...man I get confused easily when you do that!
Hmmm...it seems the end of this chapter is quite similar to how chapter 14 ended? Didn't we already establish that Mark had not come home in 14? And then the mysterious movement at her sliding doors? But then what happened? Did I miss something?
I would have liked the interview scene between Tamanio and Hal's boss to have gone on a bit longer and show us his deviousness as a detective rather than tell us. That would be a bit cooler! OK, I'm ready for 17.

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Tomanio's interview with Hal's boss was interesting and rather amusing. If Hal's vacation pans out that would rule him out, on Michelle's death anyway.
It should be interesting to see what they find on Bridgette. You never know. Well, you do obviously but I don't. *chuckles*
How she and Mark met was amusing.
And Mark never came home, eh? I wonder where he was. Hmm.
Another interesting chapter guys.
Let's see what they find next.
Greg

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Morning Greg, thanks for being so loyal. Yes, Hal may be cleared soon...well, maybe
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Mark on the other hand
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Got to keep things interesting.
Glad you found some humorous parts, we were trying for that. Lighten things up before we get brutal again.
Geri
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