It couldn't be true. There was no way. It wasn't even possible for that to be true. But as the words had left his lips I knew he was telling the truth. His exact words were, "Twenty-four hours, starting in ten minutes, I will come to get you, and kill you. If you tell the police you shall die sooner." 1
"Isn't there anything I can do to make you change your mind!?" I screamed. "Jonathan, why are you doing this!?" Jonathan just laughed and simply said, "Why shouldn't I?" I couldn't speak. Just a few hours ago he said he loved me! What was going on in his head?2
"Just live these last hours of your life as you want to. Good-bye Arriana." Those were his words. Four minutes until my twenty-four hours started. In those four minutes I cried. That was the only chance I would get to cry. If I cried during those hours, I would be wasting my time.3
TEN PM: 24 HOURS LEFT TO LIVE- Arriana's view 4
My first hour I couldn't help but go to the bridge an think of jumping. It would be better than getting murdered. She had no family, no friends, and no on to look up to. What was left of her life but feeling the emptyness that made her feel like she was alone in a room full of people? Jonathon WAS the only one she could. But not anymore.5
But that wasn't the answer. After all, you can't always run from your problems. Or jump in my situation. Nothing could solve this anyway. He could stop me before I jump and kill me before my hours were up. So either way I would die for sure. 6
I decided I would walk to my usual spot. I would always travel there to think. I would sit in a huge tree and close my eyes. I would only do this for the rest of this hour. There was nothing else to do anyways. Nothing I could do but think of where to go. 7
On my there I looked at everything closer. I noticed how unusually beautiful it was for this time of year.
Comments
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That was great!
I kinda disliked the opening though, right up until the evil threat anyway. There was too much repitition for my liking. oh and in the last paragraph I think you forgot to add in the word 'way' between on my and there i looked. Just trying to help, not being evil. Really did enjoy this and I hope you continue writing.
beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 5, characters: 3.
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This was really good! Unique tiitle, and awsome story! Good luck, I-Love-Someone!


