Cut

Cutting helps/when you seem sad/when things are bad1

Don't talk to friends/they make things worse/they might push you to ride in a herse2

depressed as it is/this is my poem3

please don't judge/i sucks like fudge

Depressed? Exactly.

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  • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
    July 9, 2008

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    Hi and welcome to SW.

    You are a talented young person who has a good way with words. But I’m afraid I’m lost on what you are trying to say. Probably my age showing but there isn’t enough of a narrative for either prose or lyrical writing.

    Self-mutilation is your apparent theme? But you don't provide a reason.

    I hope you continue putting your ideas on paper or should I say a screen.

    Geri