[ I know I didn't mean it; it just sort of... happened. I hate myself for what I've done, and they all hate me, too. I never meant to abandon her--to ruin our friendship. Is there a chance I can save it somehow?1 ]

I know I didn't mean it; it just sort of... happened. I hate myself for what I've done, and they all hate me, too. I never meant to abandon her--to ruin our friendship. Is there a chance I can save it somehow?1

You would not beleve what happened. See it all started when I met Justin, my best friend's boyfriend. But see, Justin wasn't her boyfriend, yet. She had just told me that she saw this really HOT guy and she had to show him to me. So we walked down the hallway, stopped and stared. Standing in front of us was the most GOURGOUS guy ever! We looked and each other and smiled. I didn't see him for 2 more months. The next time I saw him was at my best friends birthday party. 2

It was a Friday and he looked at me and smiled. I smiled back. We were the only to in the room. He motioned for me to come sit next to him so I did. During most of the party, I was sitting on one side while my friend was sitting on the other. When she wasn't looking he kept putting his hand on my arm. Each time, I would slap his hand away. The next time he did it, no one was in the room except us. I slapped his hand away but he grabbed it and pulled me to him until he kissed me. At that time, my friend walked into the room. She yelled, "WHAT IS GOING ON??" He hurray and pulled me on top of him to make it look like I was the one doing stuff it him. Suddenly, my world was turned upside down. That's when he pulled up my shirt to the top of my stomach and said, " jezz, honey. She just sat next to me and was all over me!" I stared and her in disbelief. " That is SO not true!" I screamed. " He was all over ME!!!" I looked at the expression on my friends hurt face and you could tell she didn't believe a word I said. " I am telling the truth!" I tried again to convice her. She got up and walked out of the room. I turned to look in Justin's face just as he pulled me even closer. He stuck his hand in the back pocket of my jeans. That's when I realized I liked him too. He was the one for me. He was kissing me and I was kissing him and there was nothing in the world I wanted more.3

That was 9 months ago. I am now graduated from high school and me and Justin are happily still together. There isn't a day in the world though that I wish I could change the past. That me and my friend could still be bff's but that will never happen. Anyways, she in married now with quintuplites on the way!!!!!! She got her happily ever after and I got mine.

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  • Radiance
    July 7

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    Adult entries aren't allowed... but this isn't really an Adult story; would you mind removing that tag? It'd be appreciated.

    This is an interesting entry. It moved rather fast, and the provided paragraph didn't seem to fit with the rest of the story, but it had a good plot. Perhaps if there was more detail, it might work better? I like to feel connected to the protagonist, but in this piece it's a little difficult. The narration feels detached. I'd really like to get to know this character BEFORE all the drama occurs.

    Friendly tip: that middle paragraph (where all the action happens would be tremendously easier to read if there was a new, separate paragraph each time a different character spoke. It makes it easier for the reader's brain to process.

    If you expanded on this plot and really gave the protagonist a voice, this could be a fantastic story. I think you have a lot of potential for writing in this realm--but it takes time to get used to it and to develop a sense for the writing style required.

    Thank you for entering!