She looked out upon the burnt field of her once home. A realm she worked years of existences to make for her and her family. Quickly destroyed by rouge beings on a war path. Kneeling down she ran her fingers through the burnt earth and sighed. A single tear drop cascading from her cheek, hitting the now barren earth reflected the memories past.1
Walking into the shell of her once warm house, she sat on the window sill looking out into her empty realm. To the west a vast forest once grew with winding paths and lush green earth. Now only charred trunks lay in waste. Outlining the path were willow tree’s, her daughter’s favorite place to play, weaving in and out of the hanging branches. For hour’s it seems her daughter would play with other children, planting flowers or singing silly songs. They were never alone, so she had no need for worry the Forrest creatures who used her forest as a safe haven would walk and live among them. Now none of the beloved creatures could be found. It was also one of her favorite places to be. She has her own small get away deep withing the lush Forrest where the sun beams would hit everything just right and shed a warming golden glow between the branches. There she crated a small pond with the step bridge and flowers grew abundant. As the children got older she would find herself there more than anywhere else. That to had been destroyed. Laughter always filled her world, now all the was left was silence.2
To the east she followed what was left of her stone path to the once pristine crystal waters of her cove. Even the tall waterfall which fell with such peacefulness onto the rocks and water below had stopped flowing. If you were to stand anywhere in her realm and take a deep breath you could smell the salt of the water and the flowers that bloomed around them. The water was always alive with life. Used as a place to cleanse one’s soul, play along the rocks or converse with the water creatures who called this home. She always enjoyed watching her children play among the cool mist that surround the water. She even remembered the first time she caught her son with his first love nestled underneath the falls within the small cave. She stood there for a moment stunned yet amazed at the love and admiration he gave to her. If nothing else she was proud of him, because he was not afraid to let himself love like his father was. Softly she laughed to herself at what happened when she slowly tried to back away to let them be. She had stumbled backwards on the thick green moss that grew on the rocks and fell into the water. She was so busted and knew it. All involved were embarrassed but laughed at it even to this day. Now replacing the clear water was a black substance that smelled of tar and the only mist that surrounded wasn't even a mist at all, it was a thick grey fog. The water which once reflected the ever changing sky color now reflected nothing but pain. 3
The only fire still left burning was in the fire pit. Here countless times family and friends gathered to share life, love, laughter, headaches and food. It was place where you could speak freely without fear with aid of wine. In the center of her realm, anywhere you stat you could look out into all points of it and from all points see the fire pit. The house to the north, filled with the glowing lights of family or to the east her cove of waterfalls and flowers. Looking to the west you could watch the children at play or the wind flow through the forest tress or to the south, this vast space filled with flowers of all kinds and far off in the distance caves and mountains stood and her former students home, in which they stayed while guiding them. They to were as much family as her own blood and often visited. That home to was destroyed, you could still see the smoldering smoke. Thankful that her realm was almost empty at the time of the attack she hoped those who were still here found a refuge.4
Leaving the window she began to rummage through the rubble of her home. Homemade furniture, clothing, artwork, all destroyed. All her memories gone only left within her mind. Throwing a blackened chair she lashed out in anger. Asking why this place? Why these creations each one a living breathing piece of myself and my family? What more do I have to loose? Breathing heavily she allowed herself to fall to the floor covering herself in dark ash. Resting her hands on the floor she began sobbing and beating her fist against the floor relentlessly. Slamming an open palm down she felt the hot pain of a cool blade slick her palm. Brushing the ash away she found what looked like the only thing that survived. Her daughter’s first and most prized sword. When her daughter went off to fight in the first battle’s she used this sword. She had created it for her and kept it a secret until she was ready to leave. Thankful something survived she used it to steady herself as she stood to walk out the house.5
Walking to the smoldering fire in the pit she stood for a time she couldn't’t count and just looked into the flames searching for the answers to the many questions she demanded to know the answers to. Finally sitting she began to sob, calling out to her children as she watches the last of the life in her realm fade. 6
Finding their mother the siblings whipped her ash streaked tears and finally looking around their once safe haven they all began to sob as they held their mother. All the memories of times passed flowed between them and with every tear drop that fell a flower bloomed and life started anew.7
Author notes
OK i tryed let me know what you think. 'I tried so hard and got so far but in the end it doesn't even matter'-Linkin Park-In The End.
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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I love when authors use the relationship between mothers and their children... It always makes for such a strong connection. Very descriptive and beautiful! Thank you very much for entering!
Love,
Katy
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aww that means alot to me. thank you im glad you liked it. i write a poem called grey about this as well.
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This is very discriptive! Great job! Good luck in the contest, cuz I believe that's what the um.....'aurhor' wanted. something with nature! Like I said Good luck, but you won't need it.
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I know there is more to it i have anothe rverson not posted with more i posted that for the contest thankx for the read im for bed soon and my eys huirt or id read yours but i promise you i will
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this was very well don hun. I love the whole mother children nature thing. I am a mother of 4 and could greatly apprichiate the simplistic beauty that you have put before the reader. this is so beautiful and captivating. I am sure much more could be added. well done
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Thankx you for the comments and good luck with judging the contest im glad you liked it.
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Nice piece! Lovely feel to it. I love the imagery and the elements of nature. Well done! My spellChecker does the same thing with forest, it can be very bothersome. Anyway, I really loved the last bit, so sad and so sweet.
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Thank you. I have two versions of this one i have not posted ands this one i entred this in the contest that excluded anything that had to do with fantacy crestures or themem but it had to have a feel for it. so the other version does and the spell checker each time would do that to forest for some reaon on thid an dmy word perfect i dunno ill try to fix them again thannk you fot the read and your kind words. Im glad you enjoyed it
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You have so many beautiful descriptions in here! The imagery is fantastic... Great job! The story kept my interest the whole way through and I kept wanting to know more. You hve a lovely vocabulary too, and that is something that I constantly strive for! I love this story and I was just dying for more and more background as to how their home came to be destroyed! (I know that it isn't necissary to put everything in detail in short stories, and obviously you chose not to, and this story doesn't NEED it, but if you ever write more on this I would love to read it!)
Although you did a fine job describing the setting well, I wish that you would have been a bit more specific on the character and her children. I don't think that it would be necessary to write exctly how many she had or their ages, but perhaps giving a few more clues as to how many she had and how old they were now would help the reader visualize the story better.
I noticed that you took the time to capitalize "Forrest" every time. Did you mean to spell it the way you did or did you mean "Forest"?
Anyways good work! Keep it up! (Thanks for the nice critique on my story as well!) Good luck in the contest!
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