Too Far

"Do you want to?"1

I ask the darling freshman girl.2

Her hair is blonde, and her eyes are the deepest shade of green.3

And she is mine, or at least she will be.4

"Yes!"5

Her answer is maddening to me.6

Yes, she wants me, she wants it all.7

And who am i to tell her no?8

I lay her on my bed, gently,9

Making sure not to harm my beautiful,10

Radiant, little girl.11

She hardly reached my chest in height.12

I could see her little weight shift,13

And relax on my matress.14

She was ready!15

She was willing!16

I undressed her ever-so slowly,17

Savoring every moment,18

Every second,19

Every sound.20

Her skin is soft.21

I rub her.22

Soft at first,23

but gaining increasing speed.24

She is wet!25

She wants it,26

Now is the time,27

Now is the time.28

I enter her,29

Softly, gently, caringly.30

I looked at her,31

She looked at me.32

Her green eyes stung into mine,33

And her gaze shifted,34

To where we were currently connected,35

And she stared.36

She started to squirm and move.37

"What is wrong?"38

"This,39

this is all wrong!"40

She says stop!41

She says NO!42

NO, NO, NO!43

GET OUT OF ME!44

Tears begin to roll down her soft cheeks,45

She swings out,46

I catch her wrist and pin it down,47

Along with the other.48

She screams in Fear!49

I start thrusting,50

Harder and Harder.51

She screams in Pain!52

What were once droplets are now streams,53

Streams and rivers ran down her face.54

Her scream had ceased,55

But had been replaced by a pathetic sound.56

This sound further enraged me.57

Harder, Harder, and Harder!58

Louder, Louder, and Louder!59

Till a final SCREAM!60

I removed myself from within her,61

Enjoying my ecstacty.62

She curled into a ball,63

Whimpering.64

Didn't she enjoy it?

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  • Naive.
    August 15, 2008

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    I've already commented on this before, and I feel the same now.

    Thanks for entering and good luck!

    -jj

  • Talisa Tourniquet
    July 31, 2008

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    ..I think it is very wrong that i thought this was the hottest most sexiest thing i have ever read. I loved this.
    Good job and good luck<333

  • Naive.
    July 15, 2008
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    This is so powerful. I like the way it was written, and even though there weren't a lot of words, I still felt tons of emotion. Instead of the last line really hitting home, I felt like the entire piece did. I loved your description of the girl and how she appears to the rapist. Great topic to write about that is definitely twisted. No criticisms (which is odd for me. xD).

    Thanks for entering and good luck! =]

    -jj