Emotional Sanctuaries

The words flew across the page in a blur of ink. They seemed to dance against the paper to the solemest of tunes. Each sentenced would flow into the other with the grace of a Russian Ballerina dancing to a flurry of beautiful Sonatas. 1

Laura lost herself in the twirls and jumps of the book in front of her. She always did. It was her only santuary, a place to lose yourself and forget about the troubles in the world. Laura would always dream of waking up and finding herself in her favorite book. 2

Maybe 'Pride and Prejudice' or 'Where the Wild Things Are'. She would greet Elizabeth in a blooming courtyard garden or one of the fluffy horned monsters lurking in the sparse forest. Maybe a short, elegant bow or a deep, loud, gleeful roar would be the charactors response. They would laugh in the drawing room or pick berries by the dark waters of a lone river. 3

They would say their goodbyes with a slight wave and innocent hug or she would be engulfed in strong, hairy arms and cast off in a small, white boat. Laura would always smile when she thought of these imaginative possibilities. Oh to escape the problems she always put herself in by just jumping into ink-filled, literary pages, of information and colorful detail. Maybe then her parents would return to take her away from the nongrateful family of all boys that decided to adopt her when she was 5. Then the beatings would stop, maybe she would get fed a whole meal everyday, be able to take a shower alone without constant uncomfortable touchings. If only she could escape to her books. She wouldn't mind the criminals or mental patients that wanted to take over everything for their own. They would surely be better then what she was going through in her poor excuse for a life.4

Maybe one day she would find someone like Silvertongue from the book Inkheart, who could read her into a book and then read her out when all the evil of her true world was gone. 5

If only her saftey was real and reliable. 6

Maybe then she wouldn't have pissed on the stick and tested positive.7

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  • Melancholic Smile
    August 21

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    This was so sad and at the same time lovely. Sad that her life was so awful she just wanted to escape and lovely that she had her books to escape into her imagination. The last line came as a bit of a surprise and I can only assume the pregnancy has resulted from the abuse (uncomfortable touchings). If so, I would maybe have added another line or two just to make the link between them. Or if it was by someone else I would have added another line such as "If only her safety was real and reliable. Maybe then she wouldn't have let x do those things to her. Maybe then she wouldn't have pissed on the stick and tested positive." I think that might have pulled it together more. Overall though, it's very sad that this is a real reflection for how a lot of young people feel about life - like they just want to escape It was a good short write, I would like to read more of it. And just before I finish, I did notice a few spelling errors which you can run spell check and fix to make it flow better

    Thanks for entering and good luck


  • EverRose
    August 7

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    W-O-W! This was very short, but so awesome! I really liked how Laura wished she hadn't live in reality, somewhere else. a better world in a say, (even if the stories in the books were evil, I'm sure she thought they were better than nothing, lol.) I loved the description, and emotion you've portrayed here.
    What I'm a little wary on, is just how you ended it with her saying she was pregnant. I kind of felt it really had nothing to do with the clashing of her un-happiness and wanting to live inside her books instead of reality. Don't get me wrong, I loved it! I just was not to sure about that last part. You have a great talent and I hope you keep writing!
    Great entry and thanks for entering my contest!
    -Rose


  • Bethany
    April 1

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    oh, that last part was kinda surprising
    i loved the description and details you gave
    it was very interesting to say the least
    good job, your a pretty good writer
    good luck in te contests


  • hannah37
    August 9, 2008
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    that was pretty awsome!!
    i lovedddd the last line!! :]
    ily. -hannah banana.


  • Nienna Calmcacil
    July 7, 2008

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    Oh damn! Lol. That last line just made me jump hahaha. Very nice, though. I loved the imagery in the beginning.


  • Bree Birichino 23
    July 5, 2008

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    ok so i REALLY like this one!
    the only thing i ahve a question on is how did it get to her being abused and where did the pregnency come in?
    But other then that i loved it!
    keep it up!


  • No Comment
    July 5, 2008

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    Not so much of a tear jerker but this is so true. I know a lot of people who live themselves into books like this. The decision to add you as a finalist is completely up to Bree but I would atleast give this an honorable mention. Great description but I felt that you could of gone a bit further with this. Maybe you could of added a few more examples or turned this "Excerpt" into a full story. Whatever you choose to do with this, goodluck in this contest.

    Soul


    • Darkhearted
      July 5, 2008
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      I really can't think of a really good tear jerker right now but I have one on word that I may enter if she allows me. thanx for the comment and I will try and make it better... btw, the last line is really wierd but I just wanted to put all my hate into it thats why it is out of place.

      Chey-Bear

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