Gone

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You can be sad that she is gone2

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or happy that she was ever here,4

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you can let her memory become a smile6

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or let her memory become a tear.8

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She was an angel came to save us all,12

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we all knew she would earn her wings one day,14

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that day seems to have came way to soon,16

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for she is gone and flown away.18

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You can live on all your yesterdays,22

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even though she would not want you too,24

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or you could move on to tommorow26

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because thats what she would want you to do.28

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Remember the life she lived, 32

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remember the good times you had,34

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not the fact that she is dead,36

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don't let her death make you sad.38

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She did not go to Heaven alone,42

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a part of you went with her too44

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the day God called her home,46

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and a part of her stayed here with you. 48

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She is watching over us all,52

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she is always watching you,54

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she watches all the things you say,56

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she knows everything you do.58

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So try and live a life62

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that would make her glad,64

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live a life that will make her proud,66

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not one that will make her sad. 68

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Always remember her for who she was,72

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not the fact that she is gone,74

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everything will be okay,76

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awaken to a brand new dawn,78

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Just open your eyes82

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and you will see84

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a world of oppurtunity86

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that she left for you and me. 88

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  • Rhubarb
    August 25

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    Well done, this is lovely. Once again your rhyming and rhythem was great! You write with lots of emotion, and everything is very true in this poem.


  • Sousuke
    July 8

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    Good Job on the poem. The speaker spoke some real words of wisdom. Having felt the loss of a loved one myself, I take a lot of the words to heart. Though this paragraph is a little repetitive:
    You can live on all your yesterdays,

    even though she would not want you too, ---This line.

    or you could move on to tommorow

    because thats what she would want you to do.---and this one.

    Finally, you spelled opportunity* wrong. Anyways, like I said, good job ^^



  • ToxicXxXTomatoes
    July 6

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    Now I usually don't like poems, but this one was VEEERY good, and I really liked it!
    You're a great writer.
    Keep up the good work!!


  • Andy-
    July 6
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    aww

    that's so nice it's awesome great work=)

    Andy


  • BruisedConfessions
    July 5

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    wow!

    that was quick! quite an inspiration you got from my poem i like the effect you've made and i like yours better keep up the good work.

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