She Is Gone

You can shed tears that she is gone;1

Or you can smile because she has lived.2

You can close your eyes and pray that she'll come back;3

Or you can open your eyes and see that she has left.4

Your heart can be empty because you can't see her;5

Or be full of the love you shared.6

You can turn your back on tomorrow and live on yesterday;7

Or you can be happy for tomorrow because of yesterday.8

You can remember her and only that she's gone;9

Or you can cherish her memory and let it live on.10

You can cry and close your mind, be empty and turn your back;11

Or you can do what she'd want: smile, open your eyes, love and move on.12

Author notes

This is a poem dedicated to a friend on her mothers' death.May Allah guide her soul.

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  • Elegant Inspirer
    July 31, 2008

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    That is so beautiful words cannot express. I really really like this. You have no idea. I am a firm believer that God knows when you need to hear something and if he really wants you to hear it he will keep repeating it in your life till you hear it and understand it. For me this is one of those things I need to hear the sad part is is that I havn't been paying much attention. Your poem made it click for me. Thank you. You may not have written it for me but it says what I need to hear all the same.
    Thank You from the deapths of my soul.
    Elli


    • BruisedConfessions
      August 5, 2008
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      I'm honored by your comment. I'm more happy to have helped you in this way. It's always amazing to know that your writing is not only liked by people but actually understood and being related to. Thank you for the comment!

      ~Arooj~

  • Mareann52
    July 17, 2008
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    4 stars

    Very nicely writen poem, very emotional and inspirational. Good job, thanks for sharing, Mareann

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.

  • starwisher
    July 16, 2008
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    Sad but Joyful

    I cried, but was happy. It was a lovely way to put it. I really enjoyed it.


  • SignifyingNothing
    July 13, 2008
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    I've found that in the beginning, after losing someone you love, the memories of happy times with them bring pain, because there won't be any more. But in time, its those very memories that bring comfort.

    This was well-expressed and I can tell it came from the heart. My condolences to your friend on the passing of her mother.


  • Forgotten Anomaly
    July 11, 2008

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    I love how you looked at death in this poem. I can't say I'm that strong when it comes to people dying myself but wish I was. Death seems to always grab hold of my mind and refuse to let go. Moving on may be the key to it all and to move on you may need to focus on the good but its hard somtimes.

    A wonderful peom with no grammar or spelling mistakes that jumped out at me and a wonderful point overall.


  • Someday Hero. gold member
    July 11, 2008

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    Oh this is really sad, yet wonderfull. I know it may not be the same but my cousin(who is my best friend also) got stabbed yesterday and I totally broke down. I keep thinking he was dead, because all my mom said was he was losing allot of blood and such. but a friend helpped my out, and he is living brightly today. I loved this very much so and I hope your friend is better.

    Alexis~

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

    • BruisedConfessions
      July 12, 2008
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      Oh thats really not good. I hope the people who stabbed him get caught. And i hope he gets well soon. I totally understand how you feel. I lost a friend two years back
      Thankyou for your comment.


  • Kagoshima
    July 8, 2008
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    I love your poem. It was nice.... I need to make a poem about my nana who died of brain cancer. Anyway, your song was amusing. I think your talented and very smart.
    Keep writing poems.


    • BruisedConfessions
      July 8, 2008
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      thankyou for commenting on the poem, i'm sorry about your nana, maybe i can help with the poem


  • Andrew Timothy
    July 7, 2008

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    It's a beautiful poem and very helpful to someone who has just lost someone close to them.

    A couple things-->

    Line six: try "be full of the love that you shared." It flows a bit better.

    Line twelve seems too long. You may want to reorder it.


    Other than that, it was nicely written.

    • BruisedConfessions
      July 7, 2008
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      thankyou for your comments. it sure was a big thing for my friend. line 6 as u suggested:

      Your heart can be empty because you can't see her;5

      Or be full of the love you shared.6

  • cheetahgal
    July 5, 2008
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    aww..this is amazing and inspirational. it tells a very important message. good job.

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