She opened her forest eyes, tears sliding down her smooth cheeks in one long stream of grief and heartache. She just longed to see him, one last time. A twig snapped behind her, making her turn her head, bronze curls tossing. There he was, riding his chestnut-brown horse, blue eyes sparkling merrily in the bright sun. The cowlick in his tawny hair, the expressive arch of his eyebrows, the quirking, cheeky grin. It was all so perfect. Nothing else mattered. She found herself being dragged from the real world. All she could hear was her heart singing as she strained for the sound of his laugh and all she could see was the golden sun shining as she twisted around in search of a glimpse of his blue eyes.1
Then he turned to her. His eyes lit up with a beauty to rival that of the stars, shining and glittering like the moon on water. His smooth, curving lips lifted up into a warm smile, half-open in a laugh of joy at seeing her. Her reflection shone in his eyes, the most beautiful thing in the world to him, and his love was visible like burning fire in the cool blue ripples of his irises. A gentle wind licked up around them, brushing its soft fingers through his hair in a soft caress. The next she knew, his arms were around her and his cheek on hers, his skin as warm and smooth as buttermilk, his short beard rough on his chin. She turned her face towards him, more tears wetting her cheek. He brought up a finger to brush them away, as gentle as he might to a child, his touch as light as a butterfly. Then he moved back into the hug, resting his cheek back on hers and stroking her hair soothingly. "I love you sweetie." he whispered into the whorls of her ear. The vision faded, the air around her became empty, and he was gone.
Author notes
Eternal Knight: Hope this is helpful to you 
. It's not exactly... the start of a story for you to finish but it definitely leaves a lot to be said. It came out of a larger story (not on SW) so it would be interesting to see how you interpreted it. Anyway, hope you like it
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Comments
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it is good. I like it. hope you finish it
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I did
, but not on here. This is my adapted piece (in the real thing he doesn't vanish and she isn't crying) and it was fanfiction. The rest isn't on here. Thanks very much for reading and commenting 
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aw, this is precious. I think you did a fine job describing it, but I did feel sorry for the lady in the end. I like the way you described his eyes in the second paragraph. Very nice job!
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Glad you liked it! ^_^. I've been considering taking this down and either reworking it or just dumping it altogether, since I've learned to write much better pieces recently, but on the other hand, we learn from our works and I like my comments. Thanks very very much for commenting!!
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Oh cool!
Awesome! I liked it! Um....why did he disappear? lol. -
Wow....thats all i can say...WOW! That was just WOW!!!!
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wow. very descriptive and bittersweet.
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"His eyes lit up with a beauty to rival that of the stars, shining and glittering like the moon on water" was my favorite line. The ending of this description was very surprising to me, it kinda sounded a bit fairy-taleish, but it was simply beautiful.
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Thank you so much for your comment! It really made my day! I agree the end is a little fairy-taleish, but I quite like it, and it seemed like the best way to finish it. Thanks again, you rock!
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