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Frustration grips me,1

chokes ambition till I'm dry,2

bleeds my arid soul3

whispers futile dreams 4

incessantly in my ear5

lies I can't fulfil.

Author notes

first attempt at haiku for a very long time - probably a bit too miserable but it's the first thing I thought of.

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  • Gary Alexander silver member
    August 16

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    ONLY EXCELLENT

    Thought I'd stop by in the wake of your kind comments on MY story, MORT, and your unique and compelling "profile" page. The above poem is excellent and shows plenty of soul and talent. It is my ardent hope, however, that (particularly in light of your "spreading happiness" line on your profile)that this is not always true of your disposition...although...frustration does seem to accompany talent. And you certainly have that.
    GA


  • brittanyshanae
    July 5
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    Wow. Very nice, thanks for entering!