Okay so there is this guy i really like and i don't know what to do i am so nervous that he won't like me because he asked me out on a date. OMG! I've been so scared i've been shaking for days he asked me out last monday and i've been shaking ever since. Okay so his name is J.R and i really like him so he asks me out and i say ok and then when i get home i start shaking my mom started to get nervous about me and so she asked me if everything was alright. So i tell her the whole thing.1
She goes bezerk i am like Oh my God mom hello mom. Then when i finally get her back to Earth she's like we need to go shopping i will take you to the mall come on lets go. I was like what just happened i am an only child yeah i should get all the spoiled brat beauty but i never wanted that so i tell her that i should wear something that i already have. I have so many nice clothing why should i waste it. She's like fine we can go shopping so other time. So it took me 2 hours to get ready. Hey i'm a girl i need to look good. My mom did my hair and make-up and i looked amazing so J.R was here and i was still nervous cause me and my mom talked about not being nervous.2
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So i got in the limo and it was amazing and it was nice so me and him went to dinner in Cali which was a really nice place even though i cannot say the word. So then we went to the movies and saw a really great movie. After that it was time to go home i didn't want to go and i don't know what i was so afraid of. So when we got to my house he asked me out again for next week there is a great time to go shopping with my mom. So i said yes and i went back out with him.4
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Uh...not sre if this is fictional...you may wanna retype this in MS Word and get that to catch all the errors...
I've typed the first paragraph into MS Word and used it to help me spot the errors, like so:
Okay, so there is this guy I really like and I don't know what to do; I am so nervous that he won't like me because he asked me out on a date. OMG! I've been so scared I've been shaking for days. He asked me out last Monday, and I’ve been shaking ever since. Okay, so his name is J.R and I really like him; so he asks me out and I say ok, and then when I get home, I start shaking. My mom starts to get nervous about me and so she asks me if everything is alright. So I tell her the whole thing.
Commas, punctuation, apostrophes, etc.
Hope this helps.
-HT

