Bitterkeit

Ich werde euch alle töten einen Tag.1

Ein Echo aus der Vergangenheit. Ein Hilferuf prehaps? No Seine Augen waren geschwollen rot, sein Gesicht Twisted-und bitter. Er konnte Geschmack Galle. Seine Innenseiten waren morsch. Die Leute lachten und dachte, er übertrieben. Er saß da, die schöne undiagnostiziert Sociopath er war.2

Und jetzt sitzt er hier noch einmal, propped auf der Sitzfläche. Sein Gesicht ist eine tödliche Schatten. Er spricht nicht. Narben leuchten aus seinem Körper wie Mahagoni, seine Augen sind offen und breit. Sein Körper ist kalt. Seine Kehle ist Schlitz. Die verstümmelten Körper seiner Mutter ist wie Eis auf dem Boden. Ein anderer Stelle in der Küche, eine Vergangenheit Geliebte, eine ferne Zukunft, die nie kamen zu überschreiten. Die Stelle in der Studie, vergewaltigt und enthauptet. Die erste Person, machte ihn diese Worte sagen. In seinem Schlafzimmer, eine Leiche, die letzte Person zu ficken ihn. Die Dusche, ein Kind, wird niemals sehen, die er Schmerzen hat.3

Und in der Studie sitzt er, stumm, tot ist.4

Diese Worte sind geschnitten in seinem Körper.5

Ich werde euch alle töten einen Tag.6

Er kann auch sein, daß wurden sprechen eine andere Sprache, als er sagte ihnen

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German!
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Badly written German!

By the way, I have no idea how to speak German, so I appologise if this is horrible. The subject certainly is.

I chose German for a particular reason to do with the subject of this. See if you can work out why.

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  • OneLastThing--x
    August 20
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    Uhh

    Can you message me a translation.
    Please


  • xenchanteex
    July 3
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    Oh my! I absolutely loved that story! It drew you in completely, and it was so poetic...good luck!


  • AdenRecreated
    July 3

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    All I know is that "Bitterkeit" means "bitterness"....so, he's killed people. He's a sociopath it looks like. He's regretting killing what might be his mother. (Sorry, my German is not all that great, but pretty okay I suppose).

    He's upset he's killed people, and now he's dead himself--he killed himself while he was sitting, thinking? Did someone else kill him?

    I liked that I couldn't understand this. It made me think for a bit.

    Good luck in the contest.

    --Aden


  • Black Dragon15
    July 3
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    K, I read heartfullofvenom's reply and I realised she was right, so when I worked it out I saw how poetic it was, thus resulting in me liking it even better than I already did. Well done!


  • Black Dragon15
    July 3

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    Ummm. OK. It's not horrible at all, that I can assure you, just the German when translated to English doesn't make sense at times.


    What I did get is that he killed his family and is reflecting over what he has done. The subject's relation to the language is hard to figure out, since Germany spewed out some real psychopaths in its day (without meaning any offence to Germans.)

    Anyways, it was still pretty good, with a very dark mood, yet one can feel the anger, the sociopath-ness?

    Good luck in the contest!


  • heartfullofvenom
    July 3
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    I really like this. I know German so I was happy to see someone actually has written in it. The descriptions were good. I liked the lines" Und jetzt sitzt er hier noch einmal, propped auf der Sitzfläche. Sein Gesicht ist eine tödliche Schatten. Er spricht nicht" Thought it was wonderfully protrayed.

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    Viel Glück im Wettkampf!


    • Hate
      July 3
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      Ty

      Did I get all of it horribley wrong?


      • heartfullofvenom
        July 3
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        Your an amazing writer,

        OH no, not at all, you got it spot on. I mean some poeple who use translators will get things confused a bit, but I really enjoyed it. Very dark, and gloomy, but quite wonderful!


  • NinjaMegami
    July 3
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    Is this German? Italian? Latin??


    • Hate
      July 3
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      It says in the AN that it's German. To be more precise, badly written German.


      • NinjaMegami
        July 3
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        Oops...

        Well, if you can't speak it, how can you write it?????


        • Hate
          July 3
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          Lol. I can't speak it orrrr write it.
          I certainly tried tho xD It's probably all wrong. Mehhh.


          • NinjaMegami
            July 3
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            No...

            When I read this, I thought it was German. It wasn't just a wild-guess. You're so lucky to attempt to write in it.....

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