Fallen Angels Rise

I. "Loveless" Recieves a Gift of Love1

Come and see...
A miracle has been performed tonight.
This ghostly, fading soul,
This fallen, earthly angel...
She whithers no more.
For deep within the shadows where she hid,
A spark of hope lit a candle in the darkness,
And the flame grew into a blaze when she read his words.2

No more shall she hide, waiting to bleed.
No more shall her demons find her.
For now, she may rest in the arm of her angel.
He, too, may find comfort from his troubles,
And a final, true release from his pain.3

They fell alone, but now they rise together,
Gliding on wings that only Love itself could give.
They will share that wonderful Gift that can heal all wounds.4

Hearts mend and bind
Scars heal and fade
Pain is released, never to return. 5

II. Dreams Inspire Affection6

Dim-lit room. Silence, yet the sound of breathing is heard...my own?
Sleeping bliss doesn't come to these restless eyes.
Thoughts wonder. Breathing slows.
The eyes find the light from a window.
I'm pulled out of bed by some unknown force (perhaps the moon's gravity?)7

Thoughts suddenly stop, though time inches by. (A slow motion day-dream.)
My world collapses in a kaleidescope of black and white.
But you alone are the epitome of color.8

Eyes lock. My hand touches another...not my own.
Yours.
Suddenly music fills my ears. It's coming straight from you.
The light around me bends like water, and I find myself falling...falling...
F
 a
  l
   l
    i
     n
      g.
And you're there to catch me.9

III. Perfection is Realized to be Existant10

A perfect truth brightens these clouded eyes...
Perfection.
I'd never thought I'd ever live to see it.
But there you stand; the epitome of flawlessness.
That perfect vision of you--!
The very sight of you heals me.
And now that perfect truth is whispered in my ear.
The words flow from your mouth to my heart.11

"Fallen angels rise."12

You don't need to say another word.13

Your eyes shout "LOVE" to me louder than real words ever could.
(and I'm drowning in serenity)
This heart bleeds to think of you fading,
But I lift my head and believe that you never will.
Your love has broken these chains, and I'm finally free from the prison that I had made with my own hands.
No longer will I search in shadows for comfort...
Now I look to you and find everything that I'll ever need--
More than I deserve.14

IV. A Killing Curse is Revealed15

Agony!
Hopelessness.
Misery...16

A ring (that had meant everything to a soul in love) loses its gleam as I read his sorrow on the screen.17

Hearts falter, skip a beat.
Irregularity of thoughts like static.
Ice fills my once-warm skin.
My eyes lose their strength to hold back rivers.
This heart breaks again and again and again...18

I cannot let sickness kill a healer's soul!19

V. Even Sickened Wings can still Fly...(and Love's Hope still grips Our Fighting Hearts) / I Dream of a Moment with You20

Silent singing
Music is felt, not heard.21

Eyes gleam, encasing me.
Arms reach, enfolding me.
A heart beats...my hand on your chest.
A rhythmic beat of assurance that this is real,
Not a fantasy,
Not a dream...22

A perfect moment where all the chaos is still
Where all the nightmares are erased from this troubled mind.23

Time slows, but not your heartbeat
Not your heartbeat...
Not your heartbeat...24

Gentle hands stop my tears before they form,
Though, my heart already cries.25

I tell you that I'll remain here in your arms forever,
If that is what you dream.
I'll stay here until everything falls,
Until everything whithers away.26

Voices fade
Lungs stop breathing
Time really has stopped...27

But not your heart.28

VI. Silent Singing turns into Silent Screaming29

I cannot breathe.30

Can a shattered heart still beat?

A trembling hand drops a phone.
Words are trapped in a throat that is too weak to emit sound.31

Never has silence been so deafening. (It's not longer music to my ears)32

Will my heart stop...along with his?33

I fall.
I bend.
I break beneath this weight, this heavy load of chilling tears--
Ice upon my skin.
I give myself to Winter, for only she could understand this agony.34

I had prayed for "forever."35

But "forever" can end in seconds.36

VII. Ascension of the Spirit37

Rain pours down on me.38

I was onced "crowned" the Queen of rain...
I selfishly accepted that gift of royalty.
But now I know that my rain could not exist without his clouds...
My angel's clouds.
He's with them now, even today.
And tonight...he'll be among the stars.39

Though his passing torments my soul,
Time has graciously reminded me this--
His suffering is done.
He no longer has to live among this pain-filled world.
Though I cry inside for him, a strange sensation fills me...
Peace.40

I can feel his will within me--
"Let go of the pain. I'll protect you. I promise..."41

Though I still bleed, I am healing all the same.
Though I can no longer see him, I can feel him. 42

"Even in death, our love goes on."43

I believe it.
I believe in you.44

I send you a smile--it's still rare these days...
But with it, I send you all of the love within me back to you.45

A loveletter without words.46

And I know you'll recieve it.47

~ 48

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Author notes

This is dedicated to Trevor Deck, who truly was my guardian angel.

Readers...Trevor was, to me, the most perfect being alive. We fell in love through the first words to eachother. Then, I found out a terrible secret--he was dying. Trevor was diagnosed with not one, but two kinds of cancer (lung and bone.)

I realized that he probably wasn't going to make it.

But love gives everyone a steadfast hope, doesn't it?

I never gave up on him. I encouraged him to fight.

We sent numerous emails to eachother throughout these recent months, all of them filled with love. We also wrote a lot of poetry to eachother. Sections I, II, III, and V were all showed to him...He loved my work, and they even brought tears to his eyes. He wrote some poetry for me as well, and I had the same reaction.

Trevor and I...our love truly healed all wounds. He and I were both hurt horribly by things in our pasts, but we brought down our walls for eachother and discovered that wonderful "gift" of love. We talked freely about this love, and even played around with the idea of waiting for eachother for a possible marriage later in our future.

He was actually serious about that. I recieved a wonderful letter from him one day...along with a ring. I was ecstatic, of course, but I accepted it. We were, safe to say, "engaged." Many were shocked that we, two teenagers, could be talking about marriage at our age, but with this love came an absolute maturity, and we told everyone that yes, we were serious. We would wait for eachother.

But...his sickness caught up with him faster than anyone ever thought it would.  

He passed 5 days after my birthday.

Readers...I hope you understand how much he truly meant to me. I know that many of you, too, have lost someone close and dear to you.

Each section of this piece of writing I've done tells a different part of this story. I tried to use as much imagery and metaphors as I could to help others understand what truly went through my mind while still remaining creative. This is actually the first piece of work I've done on here, and I would truly appreciate some reviews from you. And again, I dedicate this to Trevor, who still has all of me.

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Comments

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  • September 2

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    This was, in theory either a really long poem, or quite a short metaphorical story. Either way, I can't express how beautiful this piece was. I love all of your imagery and metaphors and almost all of them made sense. The way you ended was so romantic and after reading your author notes, I am sure taht Trevor would have received this whole thing with great joy and pride in you and your talent. Congratulations on a beautiful write. I'll add you to my favourites list because of this
    Keep your eyes up so you don't miss a second. There might be something Trevor is trying to tell you through any everyday things like the wind or the rustle of leaves.
    I hope you use this experience as a potential for growth and maturity. I am proud of you and your capability of moving on and I only read this one work!
    Well done,
    Chin up,
    Swim.x


  • Missi
    August 12
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    I skippe most of it an I got really bored.
    Feel free 2 enter again =]


  • dark-fantasies
    July 9

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    this was so beautifully written, yet so sad at the same time. I loved the imagery of the angels, and liked how you created a misty, almost dream-like feel to the poems, yet still managed to portray the raw emotions very effectively. The imagery was perfect, the emotions heart-wrenching, and the poems beautifully, intimately written. Amazing job, and I'm very deeply sorry for your loss.


  • VanillaLace6661
    July 8

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    Good lord. That was really, really sad. I'm so sorry you had to go through such a tragedy, and I hope for the best for you.

    The poetry is beautiful, the imagery is perfect. I enjoyed reading it and I feel I really understand what you're talking about.


  • moonwriter
    July 8

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    That's so sad. I'm so sorry for your loss. You have a beautiful piece on your hands. The imagery and emotion was just gorgeous. Your AN brouoght tears to my eyes. That's so sad! Beautiful job, though.


    • NiennaCalmcacil
      July 8
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      Thank you...i really tried to put my heart and soul in this piece for Trevor...I'll always know that words just simply cannot justify what we felt for eachother, but he enjoyed my writing nevertheless.


  • Naive.
    July 7

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    Wow. I have never felt more emotion while reading a piece on this website before. This is beautiful; not only your writing, but the true love and emotion and I'm positive you felt towards Trevor. I am so incredibly sorry for your loss, but you have experienced what I'm sure is a pure love for someone, and I doubt most people will ever know what that is like. =]

    This is perfection. I felt completely at peace while I read it.

    -jj


    • NiennaCalmcacil
      July 7
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      Thanks so much for the comment...I wouldn't call it 'perfection' but even so...again, just...thank you. It means so much to me <3

  • CheetahGal
    July 4

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    they are amazingly beautiful touching. i am very sorry for your loss. Tyler would have appreciated it and been proud of you. You are a talented writer. The description and emotion throughout your poems are very good. I would try to force your rhyme scheme a little more, but even if you chose not too, it is still a wonderful piece. May God bless you through this time of need. Good job & keep writing!

    Chee


    • NiennaCalmcacil
      July 4
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      Ahh...not Tyler...it's Trevor. =)
      That's okay--don't worry about it.

      But anyways, thank you so much. It means a lot to me. <3


  • Car-Underwater
    July 4
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    AMAZERING

    I love them! They are sooooo amazing! You're a great writter.


  • Lover of Stories
    July 4
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    Magnificent. Simply...magnificent. <3 I'm sorry about Trevor. And I'm sure he loved these poems...they were wonderful.


  • Amicus2K8
    July 2

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    Never used quick comments before but....(perhaps the moon's gravity)(A slow motion day-dream)...and dreams of falling...caught my imagination and I did not want to scroll back through....guess thas what quick comment is for, eh?

    A good vocabulary, but is it not existent and not existant, flawlessness, smiles...(drowning in serenity)(Music is felt, not heard...)repetition of 'not your heartbeat', is excellent wordsmithing...

    A heartfelt write, well expressed by the notations, thank you for sharing that and for your visit...

    Amicus...



  • Pretty-Wicked
    July 2

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    Nat, you moron.

    Dear God -how can you even ASK if there is anything wrong with this???
    It's perfect. Love such as yours is always perfect.
    He thought so - I think so. Why ask anyone else?

    Look...I know he can see all of this right now.
    I also now that he loves you and will never stop...he's still waiting for you.
    You're going to see him again some day

    We're all here for you until then - you now where to find me.


    • Pretty-Wicked
      July 2
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      ...

      I don't know why my star rating only says 4/5, but I want it to say 5/5.

      *sighs*
      tech.


      • Lover of Stories
        July 4
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        The star rating is a rating for your comment, not for the piece you commented on. The StoryWrite site rates your comment based on length and other things (I don't know much about it, actually), and you recieve points for your comment based on the rating. The writers of the pieces you comment on can change the ratings to be better or worse, depending on what they thought of your comments. Or they can leave the ratings the same. If a writer changes your rating, then the number of points will be adjusted to fit. (Sorry for the lengthy explanation if you already knew this, but I wasn't sure since you said you didn't know why your rating only said 4/5.)

        ~Grace~

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