I smiled, in mild surprise1
when the girl reached a hand2
to my arm.3
Not for her balance, 4
on the forest trail,5
but for mine.6
She has sad eyes,7
blue, like her mother's,8
but with a touch of green.9
And she doesn't smile so much10
but she did as she showed me the Sour Grass11
and where the Salamander's hid.12
These are her places, she goes here alone.13
I felt privileged that she shared with me14
this forest glen, towering Pines, tangled vines.15
The places she felt I could not manage,16
she showed me, across a narrow log,17
skirting a bog, to show me a swamp Lily.18
She spoke of the birds and sounds19
and tracks and Beaver Dams and meadow flowers20
and weeds that stuck or stung.21
She saw that I looked and listened,22
the words bubbled forth and her23
hands and face were animated in description.24
And she smiled at me....25
Author notes
For my Grand-daughter Emily who loves the mystery of the deep woods...(with apologies to Leigh Hunt/"Jenny Kiss'd Me" and Robert Frost)
Please tell me what you think
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Beautifully written.
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A beautiful, well-written, touching poem that reminded me of my early childhood escapades among the trees now and then.
Thank you.
Anaya Roma
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amicus! I MISS your writings! come back!
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Good write.
A good well constructed work. I enjoyed reading this.
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beautiful
hi,
as always you have done a fabulous job. i just love the way you have with words. they are so simple yet so descriptive. reading it i felt as if i was actually undertaking the journey with the little girl.
she is a very special child, bless her.
i hope every young child has the fortune of having a man like you as grandfather.
the poem warmed my heart, i could feel the love you have for your grand daugther.
thanks for writing such gentle beautiful poem
take care
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Aww I loved this!
The description and everything was beautiful.
I found it veyr touchin.
I can see that this is to your Grand daughter... I know she'll love it
-Missi
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Ah! I love it, Amicus! It was so gentle and lovely.... and very vivid too. I felt like I was watching the girl. Did you mean Salamander's to have that apostrophe? Thank you for the poem. It made me happy tonight.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Gentle
Very sensitive, descriptive, and hmm... Gentle, I suppose, would be the best word to describe this piece. Gentle and flowing. Which is a good thing. I was able to read straight through it without question or irk. Well done.
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wow. this is very touching. it reminds me of my past crushes.
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Excellent
A poem of great sensitivity showing promise for humanity.
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This was really sweet. This was really cute that it is for your grand-daughter.
You did a really good job and making sure the readers had a good idea at the woods image. I can't do that myself very well.
Great job.
~Alexis~
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This was wonderful! It really made me feel warm and fuzzy inside...What a pleasure to read! =)
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Beautifully written poem. Simple but it really conveys emotions. I'm am really a dunce when it comes to poems, but I enjoyed this a great deal. Great imagery and i love the back story too Good job!
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beautiful
gosh , this is really very beautiful poem.ur grand -daughter must feel special after read this . so simple words , clear discription and beautiful sketch of woods . simply too good
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Oh wow...
This is a really sweet poem,
and it's just beautifuly writen,
and I love how it's for your grand-daughter...
It sort of reminds me of how I would be around my own grandfather...
telling him my secrets and always sowing him my most treasured things,
even if it was just a hollowed out tree capable of becoming a fortress.
I originaly read this 'cause it was titled "Emily",
(Which is my name too and I'm self cented like that, lol)
But I'm really gald I found this!
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this is nice. i love the forest too.
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