It is gentle, but captivating, a mixture of sweet root-bear and salty ocean water. Mesmerized lips press together time after time, transporting us to another world. Ragged breathing and dancing tongues bring a fiery heat to the cold ocean air. With just the two of us there, the rest of the world disappears. 1
Desire ignites the world around us as we become lost in a sea of lust and love. It is a spicy, powerful combination that sends waves of passion crashing over us. The rest of the world is engulfed in our lustful burning flames as our kisses grow more urgent; rushes.2
As our lips pull apart, a gentle breeze flutters over the flames, exstinguishing the desperate heat. Our breathing comes out in short, desperate gasps. The intensity has washed away. The rest of the world is slowly coming back into focus.
A contest entry
- let me take a peek. by miles of smiles.
225 points, ended August 5, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Oh! The emotion! The heat! The intensity! The passion! This was amazing, and it burned. I'm sure if I there was a smoke detector in my room it would be going off, because this was such a HOT and ROMANTIC piece! I loved every second and word of it, the descriptions were amazing, as with the way you strung your sentences together, and I loved EVERYTHING about it!
So sorry my contest hasn't been judged- I've been really busy, and, honestly, I forgot! It'll be judged by August 7th.
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Ooh! What a strong-voiced piece. The words in this inspire passion and I loved the beginning, how you brought the reader's senses into the story.
Great job with this and good luck in the contest. Don't ever stop writing!
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Whew!!!
I think I need a cigarette now and I don't even smoke!! Hehe
Awesome Job!
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Gosh, this is powerful. You have amazing description and imagery, and I envy your voice in this piece. It is simply fantastic.
For some reason, I loved the idea of combining root-beer and ocean water.
I might try that someday.... (If I ever see the ocean again! 
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This was a very well written piece. You did an amazing job even with the short length.
Keep writing!
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I know those moments, i love those moments, i miss them, but there will be more, there's only one line that bothers me and that's "as we become lost in a sea of lust and love" lust is the kid brother of love, and in truth they can't coexist
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