"Give me five," I say to my best friend, grinning.1
His hand meets mine, but it's not the numbing slap I expect. Upon palm contact, his fingers slide between mine.2
Surprised, I let my hand drop. His comes with it, and he looks at our hands with a shy expression on his face. 3
"You know, Anne," he says softly, "I really like you. A lot. I mean... I may even be in love with you."4
Is this really my best friend? Is it truly real, when for so long I've only dreamed of this happening?5
I feel my face heating up at the thought.6
"Oh," I say, my cheeks a bright red.7
He raises his eyes and gives me a smile I have never before seen. "No need to get all poetic," he teases, "'cause you said more in that 'oh' than you could in an entire sonnet."8
I am stunned. 9
"Are you okay?"10
Swallowing hard, I reply, "Nope."11
He looks concerned, but I close the small distance between us and place my other hand in his.12
"Okay? Trust me, Nick, I’m more than okay," I whisper. "And I think I might love you too."13
His wide blue eyes sparkle happily. "Oh."14
Author notes
Wow.
A contest entry
- let me take a peek. by miles of smiles.
225 points, ended August 5, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
PLEASE COMMENT AND CRITICIZE.
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Lovely
I thought this was a lovely little piece, it perfectly shows the first flutters of love that we all experience and it brought a smile to my face.
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I love it! lol it seems so real and so short at the same time. I know every chick wants this to happen to her at one point in her life. I know this from experience *.*
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I'm terribly sorry I never judged the contest, and I've been feeling trey guilty, but as soon as I read this the only thing I could think was...AWWW! This tiny story was cute, adorable, emotion-packed and lovey-dovey, and certainly IM-icon-worthy.
It was amazing, to say the least, and thanks for entering! The contest should be judged by tomorrow.
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Awww!! This is so cute! I could see it coming, and yet the ending kinda not shocked, but... pleasantly surprised me. :]
Emotions were good and the situation is SO CUTE! Y'know, I'm gonna bookmark it and read it whenever I feel pissed. What a great, adorable, way to start my day!
Thanks and good luck in the contest! Don't ever stop writing!!!
.♥. Maureen .♥.
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Oh! I love this story! It has an spark that some others don't have. Keep writing stuff like this!
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Awww *smile* this is such a heart-warming piece! Your description of the scene is awesome and you made it very easy to picture it in my mind. Reading this, it makes me hope very much that things work out for your characters and leaves me with a happy feeling
Great job!
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lol this is absolutely charming, there's nothing better then getting something you've always wanted
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That's so cute!!!
I love how at the end, he says so much with that little "Oh."
BE-A-Utiful!
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LOL! MY wittle story inspired YOUR wittle story?
What a coinkidink. 
I like the "oh" too.
Sometimes a little says more than a lot!
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