The Highway was a lonely place, but at least it was a place to think. Blaze didn't often get such a quiet place to do so. Hiro made a lot of noise in their small house somehow and so Blaze never really got peace of mind. But here, in his car, his thoughts were quiet as he sped on to the town of Eshers, a small residential city outside a large and commercial one.
It was said to be a quiet and clean oceanside town 80 miles outside of Rina, his current place of residence. Rina had a robotic perfection about it that never appealed to Blaze and so he had taken his brother's strange offer and left.
He was thrilled to be leaving but not thrilled about his mission: Find a girl, make her trust him and then ship her back to Hiro. In other words, lie, kidnap and betray. So typical of his brother, but so typical of him to go for it because of a bribe. He could have easily said no, but Hiro was a twisted person who always got what he wanted sadly.
I'm such an idiot sometimes! he thought. He had seriously considered going to live in Apora instead of completing Hiro's epic quest of glory. His father had said something about having family there but, he never said much about family. Maybe Hiro was all he had left.1
An overly friendly sign welcoming him to Eshers forced Blaze to make his decision. He would do this mission for his father, and he would do this for himself, so he could prove himself to Hiro and finally be considered part of the family. Sorry girlies, I guess you'll be leaving this place for while. An evil smiles twisted his lips into a face he didn't recognize in the rear-view mirror.
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Is there going to be a Chapter 2 .
Ooh , who should I keep alive , Hope or Freedom?
could Freedom really trust anyone with her life?
And you have got me thinking what it would be life to be without Hope?
or without Freedom?
I know it is written as prose
but I read it as Poetry and do the line breaks for myself!
This is good in so many ways.
(Nit picking: Crucial is misspelt)
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oh and have you read th prologue?
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no one is actually going to die. The decision is for other things. And yes there will be a chapter two and more. I just need time to write it. I have lots of ideas and such so please stay tunned. I love getting comments so thank you very much.
Its just a tease but more in a week or so to be added.
Oh and Hope and Freedom are best friends..
and a random question but in relation to my book:
If your name was a noun (like hope freedom , not necessarily an emotion) what would it be?
Kat
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My only suggestion is to add spaces for paragraphs, it makes its a tad bit easier on the reader. The beginning sets up what could be a wonderful story. I'm definitely curious as to why the girl is so important, what makes her perfect, and what the other characters want with her. My only request is that if you write more please add detailed descriptions of your characters so I and other readers can picture them just as you want.
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