Dream Catchers Chapter 1. Daydreams

She's perfect, he thought to himself as he ended the call. Easily persuaded but still frightened. My kind of girl.. The muse continued.
He was sure Freedom was THE girl. She was the reason he was here in this small town of which he did not know the name for it was too small to be noticed . Something floral maybe? That information was insignificant but his brothers words were crutial to Blaze's life.
He had been sent here with a shiny black car with a preprogrammed GPS , two names : Hope and Freedom and a brief explanation ( which was really just a minor threat coming from Hiro)
" You'll know which one it is when you find her. Keep her.. alive and don't bring her back until she trusts you with her life and nothing less"

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  • August 4
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    Is there going to be a Chapter 2 .

    Ooh , who should I keep alive , Hope or Freedom?
    could Freedom really trust anyone with her life?
    And you have got me thinking what it would be life to be without Hope?

    or without Freedom?

    I know it is written as prose
    but I read it as Poetry and do the line breaks for myself!

    This is good in so many ways.
    (Nit picking: Crucial is misspelt)


    • Nakatrea
      August 9
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      oh and have you read th prologue?


    • Nakatrea
      August 9
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      no one is actually going to die. The decision is for other things. And yes there will be a chapter two and more. I just need time to write it. I have lots of ideas and such so please stay tunned. I love getting comments so thank you very much.

      Its just a tease but more in a week or so to be added.

      Oh and Hope and Freedom are best friends..

      and a random question but in relation to my book:

      If your name was a noun (like hope freedom , not necessarily an emotion) what would it be?

      Kat


  • ScarlettWilkes
    July 16

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    My only suggestion is to add spaces for paragraphs, it makes its a tad bit easier on the reader. The beginning sets up what could be a wonderful story. I'm definitely curious as to why the girl is so important, what makes her perfect, and what the other characters want with her. My only request is that if you write more please add detailed descriptions of your characters so I and other readers can picture them just as you want.