Sunset

The Blackened Sun Dies,
A Wicked and Frozen Set,
Bringing Down the Skies.

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  • Asfand
    October 20
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    I love haikus!
    Very nice imagery here
    Thanks for entering!
    Good luck!

  • Great haiku! I haven't read many of these yet and it was nice to see this entered into my contest! In those three lines you gave me a whole picture and that is hard to do. Very good work, thanx for entering my contest and good luck!


  • lisbet5
    July 16, 2008

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    i liki the begginning but i think you should add more to it. I think it is getting somewhere by that begging.
    Take my advice and make it better.
    sincerely,
    lis


    • kierancluchey
      July 16, 2008
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      It's a Haiku, only 3 lines, with Syllable count 5, 7, 5. Hard to add more, when there's nothing more to add.


  • Cecilia Marlana
    June 29, 2008
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    well done

    I like this a lot. Well done indeed.


  • brittanyshanae
    June 27, 2008

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    When I saw the title sunset I thought of something romantic and inviting, but I liked this dark twist.

    Thanks for entering!


  • Shadow-Kissed
    June 27, 2008
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    wow thats deep i love it. WELL DONE!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

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