Death isn't just an action,it isnt just an action that makes you sad and angry,it's much more than that.Death is a person that stops breathing,heart stopps,and hope could be lost.Death lurks behind you everyday.Anything you do could turn to death.And yet people ignore it everyday,every hour,every second of everyday.What do you do?Live life to the fullest or hide in a corner afraid to live.If you do the second choice then you are already dead.Death should be forgotten and you should remember the people who died the way they were.
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your welcome, I have thought of that but not for my story.
I'll try to put it in there, thank you.
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wow. that's moving. but have you ever thpought of death as just a new beginning for the one that passed away? just food for thought. by the way, thanks for reading my story!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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I liked it. Very powerful and expressive!
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A very powerful write. I like how it started off, and I think you could have taken this much further and into more detail.
Good Luck!
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this is so true...really well thought of and intresting too. i would like to live like both though . not too much and not to scared. thats how i am lol.
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sorry and I dont sitt in my room slitting my wrist Its on my home page I'm not like that I dont think I even cutt anymore its just that I stick up for emos because I used to be one
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"Death is a person that stops breathing,heart stopping,and hope could be lost."
Or maybe, you know, death is the state of no longer living, and your pathetic attempt at personification fails.
"Live life to the fullest or hide in a corner afraid to live."
Now, correct me if I'm wrong, but wouldn't sitting in your room while slitting your wrists count as hiding in a corner being afraid to live? Hypocrite.
Learn to either write or type better; I can't take your work seriously when I'm encountering missing apostrphes or when I'm seeing missing spaces between commas. -
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Please try and be tactful. And honestly, to me at least, it's more about the content than the apostrophes.
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Whoa. This is very strong willed and emotional.
You might want to make it flow better by varying your sentence beginnings and keep the reader interested by using more exciting word choice.
Good job though and keep writing!
♥Maureen♥
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