When people say that that girl in the mirror is tall and slender, and her hair is silky and smooth, and she seems so graceful, and she is so mature, I always know what they are trying to not say. That she's not that pretty. Her nose is so red and round. She has a small line of fur above her lip. Her eyebrows are bushy and her lips are cracked. When she looks in the mirror that's what she sees. Then she smiles and her teeth are straight, but large and yellow. 1
She does many things to make herself look better. She plucks her eyebrows, she buys whitening strips for her teeth, she puts cover-up on her nose. But still, the reflection is unsatisfactory and she look away. I don't want to know that girl in the mirror. And I hope she doesn't know me.2
Then on those lucky, giving days, she looks in the mirror and sees a kind girl. A loved girl. A happy girl. She doesn't see a ugly, unpopular girl who seems so different from all the kids on the street. Her parents love her and her friends respect her. She believes no one in the world could be happier. She doesn't even look at her face, but knows that she's smiling, not caring about her stained, plaque ridden teeth. 3
I know that girl in the mirror. And she knows me. And if I could say one thing, it would be that that girl in the mirror seems exactly... like me.
Author notes
I did this when I was obsessing over my looks the other day. Then I realized that it doesn't really matter. I wanted to make things clear to myself.
I made the girl in the mirror seem uglier than she actually was, because that's what she though everyone around her saw.
Favorite band:.... hmm.... Evanescence? The Fray? Idk...
Favorite Book: Secret Garden (classic)
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What do you think. Should it be longer?
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I can relate to this story. Obviously, it's very short and you asked if it should be longer. Honestly, it could be, but the effect might be lost if you added more. I think it was very well done and many have felt the exact same way =]
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I liked this. It expresses how we see ourselves, though that not be what others see when they look at us. Good job! It was well written.
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Its very good, I am glad to see you entered a contest with it. I would love to read more of your work...
I love how you ended it... very smart. I also loved that you used a different prospective on it. It was beautiful... wonderful
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Happy writing
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its different in a good way using a different prospective it is great and i see no need for change in this but a change in ourselves
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this is amazing! It inspires me to write like it. great job! you should win this contest! keep up the great work!
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I so relate to this...O__O But you're right and I love how you end this! Beautiful piece, and great writing.
Oh, I love both Evenescence and The Fray. And The Secret Garden is a great book.
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It could be longer, but it doesn't have to be. I like the length it is right now. This makes every person think back to a time when they have done that same thing in front of the mirror. I really like this. It tells people that looks aren't everything, and that you need to stop stressing yourself out over the bad things. That's something that everyone could use a reality check on. Good job.
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This piece is something everyone can relate to at one time or another. I really enjoyed reading it; thanks for posting! This story was the perfect length. Your words conveyed a very deep message.
(Also, I love that book too- Secret Garden)
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very good and descriptive write. believe it or not, everyone feels like this one time or another, but we have to remember we are beautiful and unique in our own way. beauty is in the eyes of the beholder. keep up the good work.
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This is a good write.
Well structured and a good amount and quality of wording. You've voiced a very real problem that many people deal with every day and it was done with grace, flow, empathy and details.
Excellent Write!
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This was nice. There are allot of people that are so worried to fit in with there looks that they don't see how loved and wonderfull they really are.
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this is really sweet. good job, it has great meaning. u were supposed to enter ur favorite song band and book tho, so do that when u can
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