"Oh my god"Anelle whispers to herself panting.She ran to the pharmycy store nearby trying to hide from death.She started to think what IT looked like than she heard and saw the cealling fall and crumble right infront of her.A tear rolled down her cheek,it was warm while the air was cold and full of death.She saw the creature and it had red eyes,black fur,blood running down his mouth and arms from its last victims.It growled at Anelle"Goodbye family I'm glad you got away."It pounced at her ripping her apart
Author notes
I'm making this story into a novel.
A contest entry
- Whatever You Want by Shadow-Kissed.
225 points, ended July 20, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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wow. This is well written. There are a couple of spelling errors, but maybe they were placed like that on purpose. This is well done and very descriptive. Anelle is a neat name lol I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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