The man was leaning towards my face. My heart shivered. Even though I knew he would kill me I couldn't stand to pull myself away from him. His pink lips was in a matter of seconds glued to mine, kissing me passionately. I tried to remove his strong hands that was attached to my head.1
"David", I groaned when he stopped kissing me.2
"This isn't right...we can't go on like this..."3
"Why not?", he interrupted. 4
Looking into his eyes I saw that his pupils were pitch black. Indeed, he was hungry. I grunted in disapointment. 5
"Why are you forcing me to be with you...we're nothing alike...", I looked closely into his eyes before I carried on:6
"I'm human and you're a vampire", I almost whispered as if it was a crime.
Saying the word "vampire" made the night suddenly cold. Quickly I pulled the jacket that I was holding, on. But I still had goose flesh.78
The man sighed defeated. 9
"You're right", he said.
Looking down at my feet I suddenly felt the rush of cool air making me feel even colder. I looked up with my mouth slightly open to wish David a "good night" but he was already gone. And leaving me there in the dark night I felt more alone than ever. 10
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oohoooh
im very intrigued now, will probably read the rest
well done!
could you change the font? the brown on the black background is quite hard to read. -
The title will be maching the story soon enough if that's what you mean, but remember this is only a prologue.
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I like it so far, the detail was exquisite with beauty and depth. I love how you described the kiss and the absence of quotations didn't confuse me. I thought the title fit the story perfectly so keep writing!!! It looks promising.
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The title seems a bit random since nobody died, but your material's quite good, although it might be worth sticking quotation marks around your dialogue to make it more obvious. Hope that helps.
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good story but the title doesnt match with the story plz explain.
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