From Heaven's Gate

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From Heaven's Gate,4

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the world is so great.6

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I see children playing on swings,10

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I see them learning important things.12

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The sunrise and rainbows,16

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pumpkin pie and babies toes.18

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But there is bad things down there too,22

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tons of bad stuff I hope you never do.24

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I love watching you live and grow,28

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there's things you do that I would never know.30

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Like I did not know you always kiss your mom goodbye,34

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and I did not know about all the times you cry.36

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But I am always proud of you on any day,40

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even when you do something bad, I love you anyway.42

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There is a place up here right next to me,46

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reserved for you to one day be.48

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Everything is perfect, everything is great,52

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behind Heaven's golden gate.54

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I am always watching you,58

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to watch everything great and bad you do.60

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I will be here forever,64

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and someday I know we will be together. 66

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  • tsavo gold member
    July 21
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    That was really sweet. I think i like to imagine it's someone i lost watching out for me.

  • sugarrrainbow
    July 8

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    Wow!
    It was a little nursery rhyme-y, but otherwise, it was really great! Sounds corny, but it "spoke" to me.
    I could imagine a loved one that had died or a guardian angel writing this, so it was really rather emotional.
    Wonderful!


  • therumisgone
    July 4

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    That was really good, though verbs didn't quite agree all the time. I liked it; it's cute, simple, and gives a good, hopeful message. Keep working.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Violet15
    July 3
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    mmm, this was a smooth text. Very moving I must say.

  • Lopez
    July 3
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    beautiful it makes me think of my uncle who also die at a young age

  • Lopez
    July 3
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    good i like it i can feel your mood

  • Ginguhh101
    June 25
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    brought tears to my eyes.
    thankyou so much for shearing


  • moonwriter
    June 24

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    Awwwww, What a beautiful poem! You've got quite the gift with poetry! You're did a really, really good job. This was gorgeous. I wish you luck in the contest. Beautiful job.


  • Rachel Westwood gold member
    June 24

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    I have to say it - this is beautiful. I personally found it more than a little bit moving. ^-^ Thank you for sharing.

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