I miss you.

Longing for you my dear.
Only wishing that you were near1

I am gone a thousand miles away
wishing to see as soon as I may2

My dreams they haunt me with memories of you
Your picture stares up at me and my sorrow is renewed.3

Since I've gone, it has only been three days
To convey how deeply I love her I've been counting up the ways.4

This poem is the latest
But most certainly not the last5

I'll soon be back to say I love you.
And love me you will too.

Author notes

Written for a girl from my school whom I have a crush on. I wouldn't ever actually show her this unless I end up going out with her someday.

A contest entry

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  • Christine18
    November 30, 2008
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    I really liked this one a lot, especially your desire to remain hopeful.


  • VioletConcept
    August 11, 2008

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    Its very good.

    I love this line--->>>

    This poem is the latest
    But most certainly not the last

    It shows you have devotion. I like that.

    You keep the reader grasped in the poem throughout, loveing it.

    Keep on writing.

    VH


  • callthexylophone
    July 8, 2008

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    This poem bites the big one. Too many lines do not sound natural, do you read your poems out loud before you have strangers read them? Example- "wishing to see as soon as I may" and "to convey how deeply I love her I've been counting up the ways" and "and love me you will too." Inversion is nice, but you have to be careful not to sound like Yoda. Inversion is for 16th century sonnets anyway. Keep working, read your poems out loud, remember that teenage love is cute, but isn't serious to the real world.

    =3
    xylo


  • Shadow06
    July 7, 2008

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    I liked this poem. I can tell you cared a lot about this girl. You depicted your feeling very well. Good Job.


  • Envy the Sin
    June 25, 2008

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    Very heart-felt. I can tell you're pretty deep in the love part of life. Good Luck in the contest and good luck with the girl. (here's a tip: Ask her out, it just might work out!)


    • EZlats
      June 25, 2008
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      Really? I never thought of something as crazy as that, but it just might work. Sarcasm aside (I wasn't trying to be mean, just joking around) The girl I was writing about is already taken (I'm about 95% sure on this since I know she at least was dating someone, from another school, who I don't know)


  • SympatheticMisery
    June 25, 2008

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    Aww, that was really cute! <3

    If you really feel that way about her, then you should tell her. You'd be surprised what might happen :3

    I love the emotion in this, and I thought it was amazing how you were able to put your words so simply, but still amazingly. Great job!

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