Where did they go?
I've bottled everything and hid it all inside,
Now I can't find it at all,
Now I'm just a shell of what I used to be.1
What happened?
I never would have guessed,
That I'd become what I've become.
I'm just a shell of what I used to be.2
When did it happen?
I do not know, just over time;
Maybe when...No, that wasn't it.
I'm just a shell of what I used to be.3
How will it end?
Maybe, just maybe,
Some one will come to rescue me.
Cause I'm just a shell of what I used to be.4
Author notes
Umm...I have a strong feeling that this is INCREDABLY SUCKISH! I'm tempted to just delete it all...
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no no no! Don't delete it! I liked it!
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I liked it ... A LOT!
I love repatition and how if you read the first line of every stanza its a whole diffrent poem and yet still the same. OOO I just love what you can do with the english language. Especially what you do with it. I haven't read much of your work... actually this is the only work of yours that I've read but if you say this is suckish then your other works have to be damn good. I really really liked this one. You have no idea. OOO I just love it. I'm gonna read it again.
Elli
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thank you! I don't really know if I'm all that good, but I try the best I can, and really appreciate comments like yours, they inspire me to keep writing...my other work isn't all that good, compared to others on the site, but I guess some ppl like it...
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