I stand staring, my mouth agape at my coffin. The wood is rotten and a dank, cold musky smell seeps from the cedar like water. I breathe in the rancid air and try not to choke on it. I can smell the rotting flesh and hear the scuttle of bugs. I feel a hand grip my heart and silently squeeze. I exhale quickly, my breath coming out of my mouth in a puff of white steam.1
I watch, mesmerized as the steam spirals upward dancing with shadows and melting into pictures. As I continue to stare, the semi-transparent cloud claims the shape of a corpse. It leers at me, its teeth rotten, eaten away by decay and time. A tremor runs through me and I tear my gaze away from the rotten figure and my eyes rest once again on the casket. 2
It seems closer. With a shuddering breath of foul air, I reach forward to the crumbling wood unable to control my hand. The wood reels away form my touch, appalled at the warmth of flesh. Stealing myself with another choking breath, I throw a glance in the coffin. 3
In amazement I stare back at myself, uncomprehending for a moment…..then I realize, I am staring at a mirror. With clammy fingers I reach forward to touch the cool surface. I try to jerk away as it ripples like water but it holds tight, sucking greedily at my fingers. 4
The cool liquid sloshes over one side, spilling onto the round. From the liquid, mice and rats erupt, swarming around me and clawing at my legs. I try to scream but choke as spiders fall from my mouth onto the ground amongst the rodents. My eyes wide and horror stricken, I glance back down at my arms which are wrapped in tiny silver snakes. I suddenly double over in pain, my stomach ripping open, maggots spilling out. I lay on the ground, to scared and in too much pain to move. 5
I try to breathe in, but more spiders claw their way up my throat. My body gives one last shuddering sob before being completely consumed in the squirming mass. 6
I find myself suddenly able to breathe and move. I sit up, my eyes shooting open. I look around…….I am sitting in my coffin. 7
*Time to wake up.*8
Author notes
this was my dream...i have lots like these. pretty trippy.
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yep, you guessed it WONDERBREAD SS&EM, AND...
haha. gives me the chills *shivers* <--see? yes, newho. great story ness. i see what you mean now when u say you want to eat it up. cause i just want to eat it up!!!!! CHOMP! owe, my tooth *rubbs bloody tooth* MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
this is awesome
creepy ... which makes it awesome!
Keep up the great work
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Great writing !
Very creepy in a good way.. lots of brilliant descriptive words and lines.
(2nd paragraph, 2nd word, watched, should be present tense like the others)
This is very cool the way it transforms from 1st person to third person, the watcher and the actual corpse. Its like several bad dreams rolled into one. GOod work. Bennett

