faux facsimile
simulacrum comes decay
t.v. i.v. feed1
degeneration
martyr's mar's tears red and bled
clotted in corrupt 2
plastic babylons
mass-produced citizenry
termites and ants we3
tombs built easily
lack egyptian trinity
insidiously4
take out the t.v.
i.v. inside dying we
so consumingly 5
we eat greedily
addicts of reality
this obesity6
is new starvation
Arbeit Macht Frei is each day
The Status Quo play7
McGodald's deep lied
lies wrapped in armageddon
creates new infants8
harken, calls freedom
the spirit, hidden, within
calls the Otherside9
the ever-divine
experiment across lines
beyond this mirage10
never be an end
linearity is dead
should your souls open11
subconscious shadows
shall loosen their darkly holds
to illuminate12
a death before death
individuation from
herd mentality13
to the akashic
lie-dressed shimmering truths found
Sophiac lilac 14
laying in whispers
sweetly churning numinous
knowledge infinite.
A contest entry
- I SURPRRRY AT YOUR FAB HAIKU. by brittanyshanae.
350 points, ended July 5, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Whatever You Want by Shadow-Kissed.
225 points, ended July 20, 2008, 16 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is awesome . Well done. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Which I will finish jusging by next sunday. Sorry about the wait.


beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Wow is pretty much all I can say. Thanks for entering, and good luck!
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Wow, this is wonderful! The words you use in this is absolutely great. I think you meant McDonalds not McGonalds by the way. Good luck in the contest you appear to have entered I think you deserve a trophie.
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I actually meant McGodald's, but that typo somehow existed, but it's changed now.
It's meant to be an obvious religious kind of metaphor, for how mass-produced and "fast food for the spirit" some religions have become.
Now that I think about it, I should've put "Wal-Martyr" in there as well. Mwhahahha. Oh well.
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