He gently pressed his lips against her forehead as he held her in his arms. Wrapping his arms around her, he could smell the fragrant lavender shampoo she'd washed her hair with only hours before. It smelled heavenly. It smelled like her.1
Calloused hands gently stroked her silky raven hair as sweet words were whispered in her ear. A small smile played across her pale lips as the three words she loved the most came tumbling out of his mouth.2
She was his love; his everything. They were more than just lovers, they were soulmates. But the rest of the world just didn't understand the depth of their love.
Author notes
I'm female. This was hard.
A contest entry
- A Little Effort... by Taylor Renee.
225 points, ended July 17, 2008, 19 entries
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Good job. I don't know if you've gone any where with this, but you probably could. It opens up questions. Anyways, great job, I like it alot =DD
-Dani -
Oh now you have me curious just why didn't the world understand the depth of their love? Was it a forbidden love? Good job.
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Very beautiful story. I loved it. Great writing; I have nothign to add or correct. Good luck in the contest, I definiately think it would be worth a trophy.
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Is was definitely good.
Very good.
This was absolutely beautiful, and it catured emotion, which is just what my contest is about.
Every word you used was inportant, and beautiful, and they flowed together seamlessly. The point of the prompt.
You carried out your entry beautifully.
Thank you so much for entering, and I'm glad it was hard. You did a wonderful job.
I wish you the best of luck!
oxox
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Tay
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