Dream World

In my garden, on a bench
With daisies spread about,
I sit to see the moment
When the sun comes out.1

My world is in that instant
When all things seem to cease.
With pen and paper in my hand
My thoughts run out with ease.2

Trapped no more, by a world,
With pain and tears that flow.
I'm free to think, and feel, and love
With all my soul aglow. 3

In my garden by a shore,
With tadpoles swimming near,
I wade, and splash, and give a glance
Toward all the things I hear.4

Blue jays singing sweetly
Upon a tree so high,
And through the leaves reveal
Clouds swiftly passing by.5

Wind blows gently through the leaves,
The colors seem to grow
With blues, and greens, and golden gleams,
Drifting to and fro.6

And even though my time stands still
Inside my garden walls,
The outside world is passing by
Without a thought at all.7

Some day you’ll see that I am back
Sitting by that shore,
Or maybe sitting on my bench
Beside my dream world door.8

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  • MysticalRayne
    July 2, 2008

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    Rhyming poetry is usually not my thing ~ with that being said you have managed to write a piece that speaks volumes and I really enjoyed it ~ bravo !!! Your rhyme flows smoothly and with out flaw and your words are priceless ~ best of luck in the contest and keep penning your beautiful thoughts and feelings


  • SympatheticMisery
    July 1, 2008

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    Wow, this was absolutely amazing! The descriptions were beautiful, and it was written so well. My favorite part of it was probably the sixth stanza. The description of the colors painted a beautiful picture in my mind, and that is probably one of the biggest things I look for when reading.

    Thank you for entering my contest, and best of luck! n.n ((You're a finalist, by the way <3))


    • plumbdamaged
      July 1, 2008
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      thanks! and thank you so much for puting me in the finals! It made me smile and I realy needed that today


  • Envy the Sin
    July 1, 2008

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    Very Good

    As I read this I was able to almost see the world you were describing.

    One Typo:
    stanza 5: Though=through?

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