Unseen hungry ghost
Predator in human skin
Lurks among the herd1
Some folks drool for lamb
Others beef, but I prefer
The *other* red meat2
Arcing silver edge
Slices a dark horizon
Full moon or my knife?3
God's hand carves the earth
Canyon river running red
Metaphor in flesh.4
Blood on my good shirt:
I just had this damn thing cleaned!
People are so rude.5
Sleek steel crimson-graced
Open window into you
Pericardium!6
Fresh-plucked beating heart
Just like a ripe tomato
Crush it in my jaws7
Warming up the grill:
Home-made chuck on seeded buns.
Long pork for dinner!8
Gleaming white arches
Spin around the spinal cord
Horseshoe, played with bones.
Author notes
For the contest, this was for image 11.
A contest entry
- ☺Asian Cheese ♠ {Asian Influenced Picture Options}♣ by Iridescent Love.
550 points, ended July 13, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - I SURPRRRY AT YOUR FAB HAIKU. by brittanyshanae.
350 points, ended July 5, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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350 points, ended July 8, 16 entries
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425 points, ended July 15, 56 entries
Honorable winner
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320 points, ended July 2, 32 entries
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Comments
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Totally cute! ...I'm just kidding (lol), but it did have a sadistic humor to it which I love. Great write, and congrads on your HW!
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O.O Well, this was certainly twisted. I adore it, although I probably shouldn't. xD. I like how there was some dark humor in this ( ex: "I just had this damn thing cleaned! People are so rude.") It left me feeling slightly sick to my stomach, but that was what I asked for and you delivered. Very good job. =]
Thanks for entering and good luck (you don't need it).
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Wow, this was very well-written and creative. I think this is definitely the most unique entry I have read in my contest so far. And I'm looking down at hey there day's comment.... every stanza is a haiku?? Wow, I would have never noticed that in a million years if I hadn't seen that comment. That's a brilliant idea! Thanks for entering and best of luck!
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"Fresh-plucked beating heart
Just like a ripe tomato"
Ouch! That must hurt. It was gross, and twisted, and very disturbing, but I liked it in a very sick way. It left a grim smile on my face (and an ache in my stomach, but...oh well) when I was done reading it. Great imagery.
OHMYGOD! And I just realized- every stanza was a haiku! WOW! Great job. Again.
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They're technically senryu (being dark/cynical/humorous about human nature/behaviour rather than serious about nature,) but yes, yes they are. That's honestly what makes the poem for me; the cool dignity of the Japanese form plus the content.
And yes, I know I'm a terrible person. But I only allow this kind of shit in my writing, so no worries.
Thank you very much.
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I'm trying to figure out how to pronounce that. Thank you for entertaining me
Only in your writing? And that's coming from someone whose username is "intoothandclaw".
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I am extremely impressed, mostly because you have been brave enough to take on the brain twisting tardness that is haiku.
That last line is awesome. Frikin SWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEET.
A+ to you! and good luck in my contesta!
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Very nice, I particularly loved the ending.
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bitch he's in MY contest. not yourn.
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that's my best friend btw, in ~real life~ not storywrite land, so i'm allowed to call her names.
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LOL, gotcha. Yeah, my IRL roomie/partner/best friend is on Storywrite, too. XD
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stfu you carpet muching jeezabell.
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eat nancy grace droppings, you nincompoop. I hope your contest is contaminated by scientologists and renamed "CONTEST FOR LOSAHS BY QUEEN LOSAH."
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YOUR CONTEST ALREADY HAS THAT NAME, YOU POOPYHEADED BILL O'REILY LOVIN' CONSERVATIVE REPUBLICAN TERRORIST.
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I did enter it a couple places... was that bad of me?
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The fifth one, the one about blood on the shirt, just popped into my head one day, complete and perfect in syllable count. I kept thinking about it and giggling horribly to myself. In the end, I had to write more of them. Thank you. At least someone else enjoys my sickness.
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