Letting Go

Frank walked as slowly as he possibly could. He chose to walk instead of riding alongside his wife in their car.1

He used the time he gained wisely: to think.2

He wasn’t sure how drastically life would change now. His briefcase felt heavy in his tensed hands, weighed down with the burden of a present. Frank knew it was the perfect gift for Clara. After all, it was something she was asking about for ages. So why was he so bothered?3

He was wearing an amazing suit, as well. It was picked out by his wife, but it still looked smashing on him. His shoes were shined expertly, and every strand of his thin, greying hair was held securely in place with gel. Frank was absolutely sure that he looked as stunning as possible for this special occasion.4

“Ah,” Frank murmured quietly. “That must be what it is.”5

He was positive that the coming occasion was to blame for his nerves. It was a special occasion, and was also a joyful one, but it had Frank worried. He didn’t know what significance this would have on his and Clara’s relationship.6

What if she stopped liking him? What if she moved away and refused to call? What if she didn’t respond to his mail?7

Frank couldn’t stop thinking about the negatives. Sure, a good thing was going to happen today, but what if Clara changed beyond recognition? These thoughts had Frank on edge, and he was about to fall. Frank was sure that his life would never be the same once Clara went through with this.8

Of course, his wife had been completely okay with it. “It’s because they’re both women.” Frank mumbled to himself.9

His wife had no problem letting go. In fact, it almost seemed as if she had thrown Clara directly to the wolves. She was willing to lose Clara, and was euphoric about it, unlike Frank.10

Continually walking down the same path, Frank noticed something about the forest he was in. He chuckled to himself as he remembered exactly where he was. This was the forest that he had always brought Clara to as a child, especially when she began to cry. The rustling trees and glimpses of nature had kept her happy, and as Frank remembered, he became happy as well.11

At the end of the series of trees was an opening, with light streaming through. Frank exited the forest and stepped into the sunlight, blinking away the sunspots. There was a road ahead of him, and a smile tugged at his lips as he saw the crowd gathering.12

Crossing the road led Frank to a church. He was as ready as he ever would be to let Clara go. He might as well get this over with.13

Frank heard an ecstatic squeal, and turned, only to have his arms immediately filled with a gleeful young woman in a white dress.14

The smile won against Frank’s thoughts. “Hello, Clara.” And he kissed the top of her head. Maybe this won’t be so bad after all, he thought to himself.15

Clara looked into Frank’s blue eyes, which she had inherited, and delightfully said, “Well, daddy, you’re right in time to walk me down the aisle.”16

Author notes

The picture I got as my promt: http://s88.photobucket.com/albums/k183/america2008/?action=view¤t=20061125234951_oldmanwoodkleinmitra.jpg

OH ! And as for Starbucks, I have no idea what the drink is called! I think it's something to do with double chocolate chip frappachino or something. I go to Tim Hortons more =3



For the 'Titles and Pictures' contest, I already wrote this story with this picture : http://s88.photobucket.com/albums/k183/america2008/?action=view¤t=20061125234951_oldmanwoodkleinmitra.jpg as my inspiration for another contest !
So that's pretty excellent.



For the "Getting Older" contest, this is relevant because Clara has become a grown woman, and Frank (her father) is having a hard time letting her go when she gets married, even though she is aaaaaaall grown up.

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  • Amb0r
    July 24

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    In paragraph 8, be careful with those cliche ideas. They're okay here, but you have to try to remember they're unoriginal, and chances are you can think of a much better and more descriptive way to explain the state of mind Frank is in.
    I read paragraph ten a whole bunch of times trying to figure out what about it bugged me. It's the last part. I already knew frank was far from euphoric about it. Give your reader a little more credit than that.
    the only other thing that irked me was that he's carrying a brief case! I hope my dad doesn't carry a brief case to my wedding...make it a gift bag that has the gift in it, because the idea of him being weighed down with his thoughts -and- the gift.

    Really: I love the story. It's a nice little peek into a dad's mind. I enjoyed it. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.


    • KayZee
      July 24
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      Hmm... I'll try to think of something to put in 8 and 10 instead, thanks for the tips.
      Oh, about the briefcase thing: It was part of the picture that I based this story on for a contest way back when, and it showed an elderly man walking down a forest path with a briefcase. I tried to describe the picture, I guess. It's shown in my author's notes, if you want to take a quick peek.
      I sure hope my dad doesn't either !

      Thanks !

  • Wow! This was beautiful. It kept me wondering what as going on, at first I was wondering a possible affair, than a death, and then there it was, a wedding. The father having to give his daughter away. I loved it. Thank you so much for entering. I loved your take on the picture. Good luck. God Bless!

  • Thats fine. Would you rather have a picture?

  • Here you go! If you have any troubles with it just let me know and I can give you a diferent one



    http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/zoegirl/dismissed.html


    • KayZee
      June 20
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      Errr... I feel a little horrible, but I'm looking at the lyrics and nothing comes to mind D:
      Could I have another go?

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