Watching him leave, her heart fell apart, like that of a porcelain doll after being dropped to the floor and smashed into hundreds of pieces.
Author notes
so yeah i picked the one sentence one. I just recently wrote a story called 'Porcelain Heart' and i can't seem to get this idea out of my head. =]
And as for gender i'm a female!
A contest entry
- A Little Effort... by Taylor Renee.
225 points, ended July 17, 2008, 19 entries
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Very well described...and perfect. Cause when i lose something deep..insert 'he' into the 'she' part and that is totally me
Break easily
Great job!
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Wow.
I've been touched. This was amazing. I do feel bad for the girl...and I know her position as I have also watched my love walk away before. This is very good.
beginning: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, characters: 5.
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This is absolutely beautiful, in a heartbreaking [no pun intendid] kind of way.
I absolutely love it, and it was perfect for my contest. Absolutely. And, of course, you followed the rules.
Great.
Thank you so much for entering my contest, and I wish you the absolute best of luck!
xoxo
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Tay
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i like porcelain. porcelain is beautiful.
somehow, today i googled 'porcelain' and looked it up on wikipedia...and i am writting a story about a girl MADE of porcelain, so you can guess i like it very much.
cheers!
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That was really awesome. :] I can relate.
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