Ok so have you ever sat still long enough to memorize every detail of your own feet? I did today! The funny thing is...they are two different colors, the left one is light peachy toned and you can see the veins clearly, like they want to escape or something especially when I flex my toes...and then the right one is a darker tone of pink, with light purple veins creasing the top layer of skin, and little almost adorable folds of skin near the toes, and the bottoms of both feet seem to be almost elegantly marked with little lines and folds. The heels are rough and dry...the skin here is permanently stained brown with dirt, as I hate wearing shoes. My toes are softly rounded, and the nails are a bit to long..but still a neat white at the tips, and clear the rest of the way to the cuticle. The two next to the big toes, my pointer toe, and my middle toe are partially webbed conjoined at the center, making them a funny V shape. My pinkie toes are odd, the nail is almost nonexistent, and they are curved over like the back of a hunchback. The bottoms of my toes are rough like my heels but not as dirty...and the skin here appears to fade to a white-ish color, then they fold over decently into the bottoms of my feet, odd cause the entire bottom of my foot except the heels and toes, are a light baby toned pink....1
Oh and the skin..the texture of the top of my foot is odd, its soft but not silky..almost...smooth. And then my toes have little hairs at the knuckles they're light brown like my natural hair but still barely visible, these are velvety. Touch the bottoms of my toes and I giggle, but they are surprisingly soft even though they look very rough, like the fur of a wire haired terrier looking unpleasant to the touch but then surprisingly all right. And then middle of the bottoms of my feet are like babies skin, smooth and soft, but lightly creased. My heels have the texture of used sand paper, rough but not harshly so. 2
In truth...my feet are strange.
Author notes
Hahaha. I studied my feet. Though seriously read and comment this. I wanna know what you think.
A contest entry
- You're Prescribed to Describe by heartfullofvenom.
400 points, ended July 6, 20 entries
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Odd.Interesting.More Emotion.
Good Luck!
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I think Durian started a trend by picking a body part for this competition. This is a functional, workable description. There's nothing special, interesting or exciting about it and the style is plain.
You use "cause" instead of "because" at the end of paragraph 2, otherwise the grammar and meaning are good.
You have imbued the description with very little feeling. Even when you departed to discuss tickling your feet, you gave the mechanical description "I giggle" rather than any real feeling. A description can be made much more engaging by being subjective rather than purely physically descriptive (at least in my opinion).
I suspect your feet would be the same colour if they'd been in the same environment (temperature, humidity, usage) for the preceding hour.
Not sure how much my comments help though.

