Gold in the Dirt

Once upon a time, in a large village, 2 wise brothers were farming on a nice and sunny day and they were so happy to see their hard work finally paying off. When they finally left the farm, they heard a rustling sound. As quickly as they could, they rushed back to their farm. They were really depressed to their entire farm on fire.1

The elderly brother, Bob yelled, "How could this be possible? How could our farm be destroyed?"2

The wise (small) brother stated, "It's okay. Whatever god does is right." They farm got destroyed 5 more times. As last, disappointed, the bigger brother, Bob, went to a big city to earn some more money, but the small brother, John, decided to stay in the village. One day, when John was working in the farm, he decided to dig the soild a little more to plant the crops. While he was digging, he found gold under the soil. To his surprise, he found some gold lying under the dirt. He later found out that this gold was at least 200 years old. He then became a trillionaire. He got interviewed for a big job as a big businessman and he scores a 100% in the test. He got the job. He went to the city for some business. He found out that his brother was working for the most miserable person in the district. His big brother got fire for destroying just 1 plant. John found out that Bob living in a sort of cave house. John took Bob to his house.3

He said, "Bob, you can come and live with me. I told you that whatever god does is good. I found some gold when I was digging the soil. We are trillionaires now, but we are not giving up on the hard work."4

Moral:-- Don't quit on anything you're doing

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This is a very good story in my opinion. I hope y'all like it.

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  • iBubbles
    June 18, 2008
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    very nice. i liked the message it delivered. nice work, countinue writing :]

  • arsh7777777
    June 17, 2008
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    The characters i think are awesome.

    beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Reaver Greeters member
    June 17, 2008

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    I did like it And enjoyed the message it delivered. Very well done, though could be broke up into smaller paragraphs for better flow. But it's your story, do what you will Enjoyed much!

  • arsh7777777
    June 17, 2008
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    Awesome in my opinion.

    beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 5.