It is such a strange and insecure feeling to dive into a body of water.1
The water seeps into your nose your ears and if you stop and think about it, its very unnatural to be comfortable in doing this. It becomes easier overtime, but it’s a feeling of vulnerability.2
I dive into the water and I can my body streamlining though the water. No matter your body shape or size, it feels as if you’re flying. Tiny bubbles of air that I brought down into the water with my entry, creep and swim across my skin as they return to the surface. My speed slowly depletes into a state of supernatural serenity. I remain motionless as I hover between realities, suspended and completely surrounded by the medium of my ecstasy. As I look around, I can see the reflection of the sun in hundreds of different angles. I feel the current pulling the water across my exposed body.3
I start to feel tightness in my chest and I know that I must soon go back to reality. I look down and see the floor of the water below me and I slowly propel myself downwards, but in a way that can’t be described, it’s as if I will myself downward. When I reach the bottom, I slowly crouch; I look around and see the world through the water once more before I propel myself upwards with my arms in a point above my head. At a certain point on my journey upward, I push my arms down to my sides in a paddle motion pushing myself a little further. I do this not by timing but I can just feel the right time to do it. All the while, I blow air slowly through my nose. 4
I break through the surface of the water like a bullet through flesh. It’s a gateway between two realities. On instinct I shake my head back and forth throwing drops of water glistening through the air. I feel the water running off my face and I realize how loud the natural world is as all the sounds rush into my ears. I look down through the magnificent peculiarity of the water. I miss the feeling already and I take a breath and prepare for another dive.
Author notes
for the contest
A contest entry
- You're Prescribed to Describe by heartfullofvenom.
400 points, ended July 6, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Any criticism or any suggestions are helpfull
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Bien.. really good. I think this is like a dream desription though, that rocked.
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wow..
wow. this is awesome man! the detailed description of the narrator's feelings about the body of water and how he/she described it as another world is really deep! check the 2nd paragraph for a mistake tho k? great none the less! -
muy bien ese. it was very interesting.Good luck in the contest
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thank yu
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Wow. You blew me away with such great description, I never thought of swimming like this. So graceful and spiritual. My favorite line was:
"I break through the surface of the water like a bullet through flesh."
It is an original comparison that I have never heard before and literally took my breath away. Great work!! Good luck in the contest you have entered.
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thank you very much. i apprecieate you reading and teling me what yo think.
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Wow, I liked this alot.. Alot of people would probably understand the feeling portrayed here.
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thanks, when i feel overwhelmed, i do this and it just clears my mind
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very cleaver.
I know the feeling your talking about here, and I can say that you pin pointed every little detail perfectly. I think you stretched the subject as far as it would go and certainly had fun with it. My favorite line was " I break through the surface of the water like a bullet through flesh.", because it's very understandable, and very tempting to do when we come out of water. Very good word variety also.
Good Luck!
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well thank you, i tried.
it took me forever to think of a topic
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