As I walk across the sun-lit beach, I can feel the fine, almost minute grains of sand against the soles of my feet, delicately sliding between my toes with that slender touch, accompanied by a sizzling, warm sensation which one can only describe as being immensly pleasurable. I slowly turn my head and am stunned by the view before me. The once unsightly crystalline green waters of the sea were now a beautiful panorama of golds and yellows due to the delightful ball of flames which shines far above the cloudless sky, providing us with warmth and light.1
I take yet another look around this glorious place and am overwhelmed by the miniscule population of fellow humans. I now have the liberty to relax rather than be bombarded by a ridiculous crowd of people attempting in vain to catch a tan before their reluctant return home.2
Author notes
I wrote this in an English lesson, so it is quite rushed. But I am happy with it.
A contest entry
- You're Prescribed to Describe by heartfullofvenom.
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I've tried to make this descriptive. Have I?
Comments
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Nice.......
Short and sweet. It is well-written. Your descriptions are very clear and realistic, I love your use of imagery. You've concocted a great, interesting read!=)=) -
Even though it is rushed I still think it is well developed. You had the most extravagant word choice, and I like the way everything seemed to flow. I loved the line "unsightly crystalline green waters of the sea were now a beautiful panorama of golds and yellows due to the delightful ball of flames", that was truly an eye opener for sure. I felt as if I was there, espically when you were describing the sand.
Very Nice.
Good Luck!
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