Sneeze!! (still going)

Well...my parents are sending me to a new school. I'm not to excited about it, in fact I'm the exact opposite. Apparently, it's a boarding school. An all boy’s boarding school. Mum said that it was only for a little while, because my parents have to go on a business trip. I packed my bags and went downstairs and hopped into the car. The car trip was long. Mum didn't speak until I broke the silence.1

"So Mum, what is my new school called?"2

She looked at me and smiled,” It’s called Chadwick Academy ," she replied.3

I was going to say something, but I was interrupted by her saying that we had reached the school.4

"Great," I replied sarcastically. Mum leant over and kissed me on the cheek, "Love you Jeremy, I will miss you." I heard a group of boys snicker at me; I rolled my eyes.5

"I'll miss you too, Mum," I said
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As I opened the car door & dragged my suitcase out. I waved goodbye to Mum and took a walk to the front office. I opened the door to find an old lady at the front counter. She saw me, and then she pointed to the door behind her. I looked at the door.8

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 It had the word "Principal" on the door. I opened to find the principal yelling at a small boy. 10

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"I told you not to go peeking into the girl’s dormitory; if you do it again you will be sorry!" He yelled as the poor little boy was crying. The Principal looked up at me and smiled, 12

"Ok you can go now, Roger." The boy turned around wiping his eyes.
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Poor thing, I thought to myself. "Who was that poor little boy?" I said looking at the principal.15

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 "His name is Roger Holloway, and he's not a little boy. He is in the twelfth grade." The Principal said in a serious voice. I looked at him in disbelief.17

"Now come and sit down." The principal said pointing to the chair that was in front of him.
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"Jeremy, am I right?" I nodded my head. "So Jeremy welcome to Chadwick Academy , we hope you like it here. My name is Mr Bennedict." I tried not laugh at this name as he handed me my room key and my timetable,20

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” By the way Jeremy we have some of the girls from Miss BomBom Academy here, so don’t go near their rooms." He said as he gave me a smile. After I left the office I walked around when I was stopped by a hug.22

"OH NO!"I though to myself. I looked down, "Katrina, what did I tell you about hugging me!" She looked up at me.
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"Big brother, I want to say hi, and I AM NOT KATRINA IT IS KAT!" She shouted at me.24

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"Ok, Ok” I said trying to clam her down. "I got to go now brother." She hugged me again and ran to her group of friends. 26

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Why is she here god? Why?! Walking down the hall way, I saw a group of girls trying to get in a room. I looked at the number on the door, this is my room? I moved around the girls, trying to get in then I saw him. He looked at me. My heart felt wired as he looked at me with his blue eyes,28

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"OK, ladies. OK, please get out of our room now." He said as he gave me a smile.30

"Our room," said one of the girls, and then he pointed at me. All the girls turned around to face me. I felt red in the face. When all the girls were gone I put my suitcase up on the bed and started to unpack. I felt something tap me on my shoulder. I turned around.
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"Hey my name is Jason," as he put his hand out to me. I took and shook hard, but warmly. 33

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"My name is Jeremy”.35

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”So what made you come here?" Said Jason.37

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”Oh my parents are on a business trip." I said. 39

"Do you have a girlfriend?" He said as he looked at me.
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"Nope, no time for girls." I said.41

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I looked at the time. As I went in the shower, as five minutes went by I felt another tap on my shoulder. I turned around to find Jason standing here.43

"GET OUT OF HERE!!" I shouted at Jason, as I quickly wrapped my body in the shower curtain.
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”Umm, your sister is here," said Jason as he quickly got out of the room. I got dressed only to find Kat jumping on my bed,46

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"Katrina get off my bed now!" She looked at me funny, 48

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"Jeremy, I told you to call me Kat." She said as she jumped for a hug. 50

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"How did you get in here, Kat?" I said as I pushed her away from me. 52

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"There is a secret passage way to get to your room. Only girls know where it is.54

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" I nearly passed out. She got off the bed, and bent down, and went down the hole. Damn it, Jason! You girl player! Man, all of this makes me tried. 56


#2 I woke up due to the smell of cooking bacon. "M...mum?" I said half asleep.57

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I looked up to see Jason smirking at me, "Mummy boy." He said under his breath.59

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"Oh, shut up." I said, trying to get out of bed.61

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I went, and sat down, and looked at the time. 8:45am the clock said.” Oh, my GOD!" I'm late.63

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I quickly ran to grab my pants and shirt as I got my clothes. It was 9:00AM . "*bunny*" I said. 65

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I grabbed my bag and books. As I made my way to class, I opened the door to find everyone looking at me and Jason having a smile on his face. "Sorry I was late. I slept in, sorry.” I said losing my breath. 67

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The teacher looked at me for a second "Ok, because you are new you got a chance," said the teacher as she pointed at the seat next to ...Jason...I sat down on the chair.69

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Kill me now, god! As the teacher was writing on the write bored, I turned to Jason   "You did not tell me about the hole in our room." I said as the teacher looked around.71

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"Well, only girls know." Said Jason smiling, "I am not a girl.” everybody looked at me as if I was sick.73

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The teacher turned around and looked at me, "Young man, what is your name?" She said "My name is Jeremy Wier, Miss” I said, as she put my name on the whiteboard.75

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Rolled my eyes as I saw Jason smile at me. Die in hell, Jason Bayle! As the bell rang, I was walking in the hallway when I bumped into a girl.  She was holding an orb. 77

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"Hey, Sorry." I said to the small girl.79

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"Hello,” she replied.81

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"Can I look at the orb, if you mind?" I asked her. 83

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She nodded and placed the orb in my hands.” Wow!" I said, as I looked at the purple, pink and blue orb. I look close into the orb to find a girl in it. She has brown hair. Wait. It looks like me! In shock, I drop the orb. The glass went all over the floor.85

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 I looked at the girl. Her hair change to black and she sang a song to me, "As long as the orb is destroy, you will be a girl forever."87

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 She ran away, before I can say sorry.  90

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 As the last bell for the day rang, I walked back to my room. As I opened the door, I found something very disturbing. All the walls were PINK! That's right, pink. And in the middle of the room was my ...Sister! She turned around with a brush in one hand and a covered pink hand on the other.93

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I was going to kill her, But Jason came in time to see what happen, "What the *bunny* is the walls pink, Jeremy?”.95

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I pointed to my sister all, she did was smile at me.97

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” What are you smiley for, you brat? You think it's funny to paint our room pink? Is there something wrong with you?" I said shouting at her. 99

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"But big brother”. I thought that you like the colour pink, because your ga..." I blocked her mouth in time and dragged her out side of the room.101

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"Oh OK, now Kat get lost with your little friend, and don’t come back in a million years." I said in the nicest way and shut the door in her face.103

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Sigh. I think I'm going to have a shower.105

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 #4   As I walked in the room, I saw Jason looking at me weirdly, "So, you did not tell me you had a sister." Jason said, as he threw a towel at me.107

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"Well, I wish I never had one." I said, as I walked in the bathroom.109

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I took my clothes off and jumped into the shower. As the hot water touched my skin, I felt that all the stress went away. As I finished, I dried my hair, than something went weird. A small ding went off in my head and the "Achoo!" I sneezed so hard that my head nearly ripped off.111

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"Bless you," said Jason in the other room.113

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” Thank you" I replied, but suddenly I thought that voice was not mine.115

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I wiped the mist on the mirror. There was a girl with brown beautiful hair, with blues eyes to die for "Hey sexy." I said, as I turned around to see her, but she was not here.117

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I turned to the mirror again. Slowly I looked down to see a body that didn't belonged to me, then I realised it was me! I screamed, than I heard Jason, "Hey Jeremy, is a girl in there?" said Jason.119

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"No." I said, trying to cover my now girl voice, but Jason did not buy it. 121

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"Come Jeremy, don't lie to me. You got a girl in here." He said, as he tyred to get in the bathroom, but something creep up my nose.123

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"Achoo!" I went again. Luckily, I got a towel, when Jason came in.”Hey”. Where is the girl, Jeremy?" said Jason "What girl? You must be hearing things.125

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" I said; as I walked pass Jason, with a smile across my face. Jason gave me a weird looked, "Whatever," and closed the door behind him.  127

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 #5 As weeks went bye, all I can think of was the day I turned into a girl, when I sneezed.129

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As I finished breakfast, I walked to get my school shirt, when a small ding came in my head.131

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"Oh no, Achoo!" I sneezed. All mist came around me. Jason came in the right time for it, "Hey Jeremy, I've been meaning to tell you something,” said Jason.133

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Than Jason saw me, and turned bright red, and turned away. I looked at him weird and looked down to see why; I covered myself with my school shirt. 135

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"Why, you're the girl that was here yesterday, right?" said Jason, still turned his back to me. 137

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"No. I just lost my way to my school." I said. Jason turned to give me a stupid look. 139

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"Really now? So, you walk around half naked to find your school, and you magically came here?"  141

My face turned red "Shut up" I yelled at him.142

"Hey don't get mad at me because I am right” He laughed at me143

"Well it's true I did lost my way” I yelled again at him.144

"Ok, ok then I show you the way back” he smiled at me. I hate it when he wins damn it.145

I nod "Ok then"146

As we walk to the Miss BomBom rooms for the girls, Jason knocked the on the door, I nearly had a heart attack it was Kat.146

"Hello, Oh it's you Jeremy’s boy friend” Kat giggle. I can't wait to kill her but with to my surprise Jason laughed with her.147

"Anyway this girl has lost her way, and I showed her here” Jason said pointing to me.148

Kat looked at me with a smile.149

"What's you name?” She asked150

"Ummm.. Megan” I said, she looked at me she grabbed my hand and darg me in the room.151

"Thanks Jason” She said smiling and closing the door.152

She turned around to see me,” So I never see you before” She said to me.153

"Umm your I am new to the whole thing” I laugh to her and smileing.154

I need to get out of this place fast. I need to think fast, Ah ok got it.155

“Um. . . Kat right?” I asked her 156

“Yes?” she looked at me with a smile.157

“Where are the toilets?” I asked her.158

“Oh, in the back” She pointed at the door.159

“Thanks” I ran out the back to see a girl getting change Oh shit!  I looked around trying not to look at her I saw the ‘Toilet sign’. I walked in the toilet and looked at myself to see a girl I wanted to cry but my mind was talking to much.   160

“I need something to make me sneeze!” I yelled but what? , I looked around the bathroom. But there is only make up and deodorant and I sniffed it , It smelt like strawberry.161

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“Ew!” I said.  165

 

“Ok, you can do this” I said, I placed the deodorant up my nose. “Here we go” I pressed the nozzle and I felt the fizz that went up my nose. I started to cough my lungs out.  166

“Cough well that did not work” I put water in my nose and looked in the mirror and sigh. 167

“At lest I look good” I walked out of the toilets to see not one but all of the BomBom girls getting change my face went red. I went back in the toilets again.168

“Holy Crap” I cried, and then I heard some girls coming in.   169

 

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  • KalineReine
    November 13
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    This was a really cool story! I hope you add more, it was amazing... I wonder what will happen. This was so creative, a great idea. Poor Jeremy, er Megan... er Jeremy. Lol! Uh oh I gotta go! *sneezes* *manly voice* I really did think this was very good though. ^_^


  • Paws
    October 25
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    Awesome. I'd look like a boy if I'd cut my hair


  • Wildpaw-Lily
    October 17
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    cmon think I know you can write more plzzzzzzzzzzzz *starts making puppy noises* (Ill killz you ) im begzinz here! I wuved this story!


  • Sekhmet Kitty
    September 16

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    You must write more or I kills you
    *begs*
    I loved this, quite original and I can't wait to see what happens next!
    More more more more more more more!!!!!!
    Yes that's how much I like it
    Awesome Write!


  • hannah37
    September 14

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    well, that was a very good story.
    :]
    i said no more than 1500 words though.
    but, that's alright. it was most definitally twisted.
    thanks for entering my contest.


  • Hells Wounded Angel
    September 11
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    yayyy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! more


  • Wildpaw-Lily
    September 10

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    yay! more! u need to check the new part spelling errors e.g darg-drag
    smileing-smiling pionting-pointing umm... closeing-closing and siad-said hehe there ya go! now just find those things well anyway love it as always hope u write more!


  • Intrepid
    September 8

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    Ah IO hate starting at a new school and you depicted the emotions of this character from point one. Which I think in any story - setting the scene and emotions right away is a must and a blessing.

    You also showed the reactiong of boys very well !! I love the thought that his mother still kissed him goodbye and the embarassasment it entailed.

    Humor- the principle has humor which makes for a more relaxing and cheerful read !!

    I enjoyed your devopment throughout the story- It is something I look for in a story and something I appreciate and you did this well.

    I adored the bacon scene- Mummy's boy !! it is cute..I think it gives a little light to the story if you know what I mean - a whisky affection to it.

    WELL DONE
    I LOVE THE CHARACTERS YOU HAVE PLACED!!!

    blair


  • Edge-Yuri
    September 7

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    yayayay aya so cool i wish i would think of stuff like dat but i have so many thouhts running through my head its confusing....i'm not gonna write or read for a while only sing but you should .....KEEP WRITTING!!!!!


  • Wildpaw-Lily
    September 5
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    yaaaaaayyyyyyy! i love this story! (makes me think of crazy japanese animes!)
    and yea like people said lots of mistakes :3 oh well i love it anyway!

  • Hehehehe,He was nakey in the shower!!!!!! I LOVE YAOI! Um.....you should totally continue this,lol!!


  • Pink Panther
    July 15
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    ok lo

  • kool u shuld write more.

  • writ more

  • AWSUM I LYK IT IT S KEEP IT UP L8RZ!!!!!!!


  • Lawliet
    June 26

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    hmm... yeah, this is alot better than the first time I read it. Most of the spelling and grammar is fixed, but I still noticed a few spelling errors and there were many places without commas where there should have been. You could definately use with alot more description... for example, when Kat ran up to him and hugged him, the readers didn't even know she was there until he said "What did I have to say about you hugging me" (or something along those lines). Just things like that.
    What happens when *I* sneeze? I sneeze again >.>

  • WRITE MORE BEFORE I START HATING YAOI!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLZ

    • dont do that i am trying to get it spell right before i put more in ok plzzzzzz dont be mad

  • oooooooooooo.....i get it jasons gonna fall for the *girl* when really its a boy and teh boys gay so hes gonna like it! OMG! i feel smart! XD

  • keep writing! plezzzzzzzzzzz??!!


  • Pink Panther
    June 23
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    cool


  • pixxy
    June 22
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    great start i take jason is a lady's man. please keep on writing this story. loved it

  • Interesting.

    Jeremy turns into a girl when he sneezes and changes back when he sneezes again. That could be a bit of a social problem. When I sneeze, I stay the same old me. There were a lot of words, which were misspelled or typos. You could probably fix them with a good proofing.

    This was rather a fun story to read. I was a bit confused where Jeremy's sister came from. She was at school, but there was no mention of her before Jeremy got to school.

    Andy


  • heyevry1
    June 21
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    cool as

    this was pretty good and the punctuation was good and yeah

  • lol i get it! but how is this yaoi? lol i would love it if i could turn into a guy wen i sneeze i would probably do some wacky stuff ;P

    • it is yaoi

      it will be yaoi in the middle of the story but i have not done all of it hehehehehehhehe i take my time


  • Sailor Moon
    June 20

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    LOL ohh I get the sneezy bit now! so everytime he sneezes he turns into a girl? Sucks for him XD this looks to be some interesting reading


  • RegalAngel
    June 19
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    ... u have to check ur spelling chiki. write more or I WILL PUT U IN THE PIT OF ETERNAL DAMNATION! MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! and then i will tell ed u called him short and U WILL SUFFER! lol

    • ok i will lol i and getting kim to cheack my spelling before i do the rest hehehehhehheheh

  • hehehe (glomps jeremy) WRITE MORE BEFORE I PULL A GAARA ON YA A**


  • YaoiGalKilla
    June 19
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    woh

    if i sneexe will i turn into a guy? Thatd be cool...


  • Yoko
    June 19
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    I neeeeeed mooooooore!Loooooved the story. I neeeeed tooooooo knooooooow moooooore! Hehe.


  • Lawliet
    June 18
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    Revise and edit profusely, then I'll read.


  • heyevry1
    June 17
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    ayy

    that was great keep goin

  • YAY

    OMG KEEP GOING!!!!! AAAAAAA!!!!!!
    OR I WILL GO ALL REBID FANGIRLL ON YOUR ASS!!!!

  • plz tell me if i have spelling things so i can spell it good plz

  • WRITE MORE NOW BEFORE I PULL A GAARA AND GO ON A KILLING SPREE!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • living.angel
    June 17
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    kool!!!!!!!!


  • RegalAngel
    June 17
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    OMG WRITE SOME MORE OR DIE!!!!!!!!!!!!! SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! lol


  • Sailor Moon
    June 17
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    Continue on man! I wanna hear more on this - so far it's really good - there are a few spelling mistakes, but I can't be bothered listing them. Besides; there's only a few.
    Wasn't it an all-boys school earlier? Oh well; just write more! I'm interested now.

    Oh - interesting title, by the way.


  • YaoiGalKilla
    June 17
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    short but sweet

    come on and write it lol, I love a good story

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