Accident

Chris’s stomach cramped and a shudder rippled though his body. 'Not now,' was all he managed to think before it happened. 1

Black fur shot out through his skin, like a hundred thousand needles. Within seconds, his body was completely covered. His teeth sharpened and lengthened. Bones twisted and bent in his limbs and back. As his jaws reformed, a scream caught in his throat, choking him, until it managed to change into a howl. The clothes that he was wearing ripped and shredded as his body shifted into a new form. 2

'Not now. Not here.'3

Chris couldn’t think of a worse place for this to happen. In the middle of the prom for God’s sake. Why was this happening? Why had he let himself get so angry? It didn’t matter anymore. It was already too late, and soon he wouldn’t be able to control himself. Even though he was already feeling notably less angry, he knew that all too soon the rage would be back and that it would control his every action.4

And it did come. His fury at the red-haired football player increased by several times as the transformation from man to wolf completed. People all around him gasped and pointed or screamed and ran, but his now amber eyes were focused only on the terrified, broad-shouldered boy standing before him. 5

Chris’s mind now only thought of what the boy had done, and he grew angrier by the moment. He'd hurt her. He'd pushed her to the ground and insulted her. So what if she had tripped and spilled a little punch on the jock? He didn't have to call her a clumsy, blonde whore. Chris had given him several chances to appolgize, but he only insulted Chris too. Fury flared up and exploded inside him, like lava from a monsterous volcano. 6

Bearing his teeth, he growled, a deep angry rumble in the back of his throat. Ghost-white, the football player's freckles stood out on his face. He turned and bolted in attempt to get away from the werewolf. Chris was quick though. Much quicker than any human. It was easy for him to catch the boy. He was upon him in a moment, ready to punish him for what he had done; to get his revenge. 7

Chris lept upon the boy’s back, knocking him to the hard, scuffed dance floor. They landed with a cracking thud as the boy’s head hit the floor. He screamed in pain as Chris’s claws raked across his back, tearing his tuxedo apart and digging deep into the skin beneath. The scent of the crimson liquid filled Chris’s nostrils and began to sate his fury, but only just barely. It wasn't enough of a punishment. This boy had insulted the girl that Chris loved. No punishment would ever be enough for what he had done.8

Blood spilled out of scratch and bite wounds, bright as the hateful boy’s hair. Despite his blood loss and the wolf on his back, he still stuggled to fight the beast. His arms flailed and attempted to push Chris from his back. All that it accomplished though was too anger the wolf more. How dare he think that he could get away? What made him believe that he would be able to escape retribution for what he'd done to her? What ever it was, Chris was going to crush it out of him along with his life.9

Chris positioned his blood-covered jaw to snap the boy’s neck and end it. As he was about to snap his jaws shut around the jock’s thick, freckled neck, a shout from the crowd distracted him from his prey. The shout was different and distinguishable from the rest of the crowd’s screaming. The voice, the sweet, melodious voice of the girl he had done this for, rung clearly in his ears. Instead of running from him with the rest of the crowd, the girl ran to his side, unafraid as she had long known what he was. She wrapped her porcelain arms around his furry neck and her platinum hair spilled over the two of them in white-yellow veil. Her gentle touch wrenching the anger from his body, forcing him to only focus on her, the girl that he loved. Now longer shouting, she whispered to him in a soft, tearstained, “Calm down, Chris. Don’t let this go any further. Please calm down.”10

Her voice helped to sooth away his fury and violence. He’d only gotten angry because of how the now motionless jock had been treating her, had spoken to her. Chris had only been angry to begin with because he’d been trying to protect her. It was her voice, though, that brought him out of the darkness of his anger and violence.11

Slowly, the fur fell away from his russet skin, leaving only the long hair that grew from his head. His bones unbent and regained their original shape, leaving him as a human once more. He'd let everything get out of hand. And what if he hadn't attacked the jock? What if, by some accident, he had attacked Kaya instead? Tears began to leak from his eyes. He couldn't bear to lose her. Not now, not ever. Kaya, the girl that had tamed the beast inside him held his naked frame and allowed him to cry into her shoulder.12

Over the noise of the room, the sound of a siren could be heard.13

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Chris and his victim were both taken to the hospital. The Indian youth did not know what happened to the jock, nor did he really care. Deep down in his core, he still felt anger at the redhead. He was kept in a private room, away from everyone else. A large observation window was set into one wall so that doctors could peer in at him from a safe distance and take their notes. To ensure that there was absolutely no possiblity of him harming anyone, he was kept restrained on his bed.15

FBI and CIA agents visited him almost daily, asking questions and threatening him for answers. They wanted to know how he had become a werewolf and how many more there were. Chris didn’t know the answer to either question as he told them repeatedly, but that didn't stop them from returning daily. 16

Chris hated the agents and the doctors alike. They treated him like an animal, prodding and poking him, and examining him like some rare beast. They were lucky that they had him tied down. He might have tried to attack them and escape if they hadn't. Perhaps not, though. He was defeated both mentally and physically. He was ashamed that he'd lost his temper over something like spilled punch and insults, and the constant stream of medicines that the doctors injected him with kept him in a perpetual state of fatigue. 17

Some of the kids from school would taunt him from behind the window, just to see if they could get him to change again, only to run away if he looked slightly agitated. And soon he grew to hate them too. And why shouldn't he? They hated him. If they didn't, then they wouldn't taunt him through the window. Still, they were second only to the agents and doctors. 18

The only solace he received in that horrible place was that Kaya would pay him daily visits as well. She wasn’t allowed into the room, as only doctors, police, and government agents were permitted inside. But she stood at the window among their teasing schoolmates. In front of her she held a paper sign. And every time he saw it, he was able to smile for a brief period. It was seeing her and the sign that allowed him to keep his sanity through it all. 19

In large letters the sign read: I STILL LOVE YOU.

Author notes

Credit to moonwriter for Kaya. Thanks for letting me use her in this!

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For contest: Vampires, fairies, unicorns, elves, and other mystical or mythical creatures! by Deathnote-girl-4eva.

Option 5: werewolves.

I don't particularly want to explain any of my characters. I think that he can do that for himself. The same goes for moonwriter's character, Kaya.

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For contest:Show Me What You've Got! by Myra La-Ryn.

My favorite movies are 'Rocky Horror Picture Show,' 'Batman: the Dark Night,' 'The Lost Boys,' 'Juno,' 'Across the Universe,' and 'Wall-E.'

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  • Myra La-Ryn
    July 23

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    This was a really great story. The ending was especially powerful. The way you describe Chris' emotions is very clear and sympathetic. Keep it up!
    I really liked Juno too. Wall-E is adorable and I haven't seen Dark Knight yet, although "m sure I'll like it.


  • Wildstar
    July 17

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    Good!

    Excellent. I adored this piece. And here I was hoping that nobody would use the werewolf thing..lol how foolish of me. I'm glad you entered this! This was great. Great description, excellent climax point, and such a lovely ending. "I still love you" wow...good good GOOD! Good luck in the contest!


    • demonp3n
      July 17
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      Thank you. I edited it quite a bit, so I'm glad that you like it.


  • NosferatuWoman
    July 10

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    Very good ending!

    I absolutely loved the ending to your story. I have to admit, though, when I first read it I thought of Teen Wolf (the movie). The second thing that stuck out in my mind was that this guy made it all the way to Prom without being provoked enough to change? Kids are cruel, you know. How did he avoid the public transformation in times before? Like somebody commented before me, I think the grammar in a few places detracted from your storyline. I wanted to put "lept" in there for you instead of "leaped"... but maybe that's the word you intended to use, so who am I to judge?


    • demonp3n
      July 10
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      He overreacts more to somethings than others. He's very protective of his girlfriend so that was one of the things that really set him off. He has less control of his emotions when his girlfriend is involved.


  • moonwriter
    July 8

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    I never did comment on this, huh? I really liked it. It was a very cute story, but I have to agree with the commenter below me. Up until the end, there wasn't much emotion. It does have a very good plot, but emotion is what sets apart the good from the amazing.

    This story has a lot of potential and I think going back and adding detail would really help this already great story. Give us some back story leading up to the event. Incorporate a litte history so we better understand the characters. Give us what happened. Tell us what his initial reaction was. What was it that really angered him? Delve deeper into his feelings and you'll have your improvement.

    This was really, really good. Just remember, detail is a big part of emotion.


  • Friesian gold member
    July 7

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    It was ok...

    I suggest you edit this thoroughly, as I have found a lot of grammatical and spelling errors. Hope this helps. Edit, spell check, and fix those goddamn errors! I'm so paranoid when I read a story, and it has careless mistakes. I hope this helps you. The story overall had a good plot but I didn't feel a lot of emotion. Good job, though. The part that touched me most was the ending.

  • sugarrrainbow
    July 6

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    Wow!
    I especially liked the part at the end where Kaya held up the sign. This was great and well-written.
    I always have my suspicions that there is Twilight influence whenever I see the Native American and werewolf mixed, but I love this too much to even care.
    Is there more? This has gotten me hooked!
    Great job!


    • demonp3n
      July 7
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      Thank you. Actually, originally the character, Chris, was a normal human, but a friend told me that he would make a good werewolf. So yeah.

      Um, no there isn't anymore at the moment. Most likely there will be soon, but I'm waiting for an idea before I continue the story.


  • I-Am-Austin
    July 4
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    this was just wow!


  • Forgotten Tink.
    June 29

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    Wow.

    You portrayed so much emotion here...I teared up. Making me cry is not an easy feat my friend. Good job!


  • plague
    June 27
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    nicely done! are there any sequel to this?
    I felt the anger and sadness in chris' heart!!


    • demonp3n
      June 27
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      Thank you. Um, there's not a sequel right now, but I will probably write one eventually. Two others have already asked if I was going to write one.


  • Olinda
    June 25

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    this is very beutiful! But I dont think that you entered my contest with it. Try again please, because it is not on my list of people who entered...


  • stargirl
    June 19

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    Oh my god I wanna cry now! That was so sad, I feel so bad for him. I was really impressed by the fact that there were no errors within this piece. I hope you keep this up I wanna know what happens next!

  • plastic necklaces
    June 16

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    Very lovely. So raw and harsh throughout, but sweet at the ending and her sign somehow gives the rest of the story closure. I enjoyed reading this.


  • WritersEffigy gold member
    June 16

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    Puberty is a bitch.

    Although damn, that guy really got the full hit didn't he?

    I liked it, a bit cliche at times, but still good. Thanks for entering!


  • Bella-Cacciatore gold member
    June 16

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    Wow! great story! Is there going to be more? it would be good to see what happens to chris and Kaya!
    Keep it up!


    • demonp3n
      June 16
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      Maybe. I wasn't planning on extending it. But now I might. Thank you so much!

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