Snow White and the Seven Deadly Sins

She was seductive and beautiful, a favorite of he house. When she was around, there were no barriers or limits. The moment she entered a room, lust paraded through their air like a dangerous venom that infected each and every man. Thier minds became clouded as they participated in what some would call a dance of death.1

But no one was sure where the name came from. It was a mystery, but one that no one cared to solve. All they knew was that she was captivating and rather enchanting. With one demure flip of her gorgeous dark hair, she had them panting. They never stopped to question. They never stopped to think. Once they were under her seductive spell, they didn't look back. One might say they never recovered. And others will argue that, once you go with Snow White, you'll never see daylight again.2

Maybe that's why she's made a rather interesting name for herself. You see, when you go with Snow White, you don't just get her. She has seven groupies, as well call them. But they're not like regular groupies. Oh no, these groupies are a little more dangerous.3

Together they're called Snow White and the Seven Deadly Sins. Why? You may ask. I'm not sure you really want to know why. But, if you really want to know, I think the best way to learn is by watching. Don't worry, I'll clear some things up near the end. Look! How perfect! Snow White's leaving with her next victim er, maybe I should say, client. That sounds nicer.4

"So where're we going, babe?" the client asked, his eyes scouring her body.5

One couldn't blame the poor stupid man. After all, she really wasn't wearing much. And what she was wearing was all made of leather. That whore. No wonder she entices men. She dresses in such revealing clothing. Shield your children's eyes! You don't have any children? Well, whatever you do, don't shield your eyes. If you so much as blink, you could miss something important. But enough about that, let's get back to Snow white.6

"You'll see," she purred, taking a long puff from her cigarette. "You'll see."7

Dropping the cigarette to the ground, she grabbed the man's wrist and pulled him into ner van. In the van, they drove to a small little cottage sweetly nestled in the forest. He probably thought he was getting lucky. I almost pity the man.8

It was out of the car and into the house they went. We watch from the window as the horrific events inside unfold.9

At first, there was kissing. And then there was touching. Don't worry, it doesn't go any farther. The only people who can sleep with her and survive are her seven sins. But that's a different story.10

Then comes the bad part. You see all seven sins pile into the room with Snow White and the man gathered in the center. She pins him down while Happy pulls out a gun. And then the man is shot. In the head. Three times. It's cruel, but it's the way she works.11

The body is burried and the blood is cleaned. Snow White doesn't feel bad. In fact, she takes pleasure in plotting out her victims demise. Long before she takes a victim, she plans how she's going to kill them. Or rather, which sin gets to do the job.12

Snow White and Happy usually fight over who gets to kill them in bed. Happy, who some say represents lust, likes to tie them up while Snow White's 'freshening up' and play a little torture game. He draws it out. Usually happy likes slow and painful deaths.13

Grumpy's so violent and wrathful. He likes things like golf clubs and baseball bats. He takes his everlasting anger out on the poor, unsuspecting victim. Can you say painful?14

Doc is exceptionally arrogant. He enjoys taunting and terrorizing his victims. He lets them know that they're stupid, worthless, and completely helpless. In order for it to end fast, they have to sing his praises. You know Doc is a sucker for a kiss up.15

Dopey's a jealous drunk. He hates watching Snow White with her victims. I think he's in love with her. The poor soul. If only he realized that she only uses him. But that doesn't matter. He takes pleasure in killing the men that touch his delicate Snow White.16

Have you ever noticed how fat Bashful is? There's a reason for that. He overeats when he's happy, sad, angry, or joyful. He just likes food a little too much. Maybe that's why he offers the victims a poisoned drink.17

Sleepy's a real emo kid at heart. That's why he sleeps so much. He thinks that if all he does is sleep he won't have to face cold harsh reality. When he's awake, though, he can be a real bitch. He kind of enjoys killing them in their sleep. After all, he doesn't like strangers sleeping in his house.18

You wouldn't expect it, but Sneezy's a pretty greedy character. He doesn't dirty his hands ,but he does steal all their stuff after they're gone. We think he's saving up for some expensive sinus surgery. Many theororize that's the only thing that keeps him with the group.19

But Snow White's the worst of them all. While not a sin, she's worse than the sins. Snow White, a seductive temptress with a black heart, lures them in. She knows what she's doing. Believe it or not, the sins are just her puppets; mindless marionettes. They don't act without her signal.20

I think the most important thing you could learn from this little... experience is stay far away from Snow White. Remember, she's a bitch from hell.21

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Sorry if this isn't amazing. I've never written anything this dark before.

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  • Princess Dawnikins
    November 19
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    "Sleepy's a real emo kid at heart." that part made me die lol. Thanks for entering!


  • Xm
    November 8
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    This was nothing but pure good imagination. Seriously. True, I was expecting a bit more gore, or a more intricately described murder. Also I think you should have introduced Snow White and the Seven Sins first, then proceeded to describe the murder. I didn't understand why Happy signifies Lust, or what sin Sleepy signifies. So far I've got Gluttony, Envy, Wrath, Avarice and Greed. This was a good story though. Though her having sex with seven of them...just so eww. Dopey must be having fun then.


  • Toxic Paradox gold member
    October 28

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    The beginning was brilliant - at first I thought she was your average Princess and I thought the men were dirty and lecherous. But then BANG it transpires that she's an evil cow.

    After this I felt that it lost momentum. There were several typos throughout and the listed descriptions of the sins wasn't really conducive to a 'story', as such.

    Having said that, I really like this story and am eternally grateful that you've entered my contest.


  • MsAlee silver member
    October 11
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    Interesting twist there. I love how you used each dwarf as a sin and went from there.


  • poetry is soul
    September 19

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    i really like this story! it made me laugh at some parts. like how you were describing the dwarfs... sleepy an emo at heart. and this puts a whole new look on snowwhite. very good job! i really liked it. keep up the good work!


  • Six-Feet-Underwater
    September 3

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    It's deffinately a different take on snow white. You're descriptions are great and I love the narration. Good job.


  • XxAFSRockerxxKarixx
    September 3
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    That's an interesting view of Snow White. Haha...


  • HoneyAngel
    August 29
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    Haha, I love it! Such a very twisted outlook on Snow White and the Seven Dwarves. I congratulate you wholeheartedly on putting this together.

    Just one thing; in paragraph 12, "burried" should be "buried". Other than that, top job. You led up to everything well, and your descriptions were just the right amount.

    Good luck and good job.

    Angel.


  • Naive.
    July 6

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    =] I enjoyed this. Especially the last line. Oh, yes. She is a bitch from hell. =D

    I actually expected this to be rather serious, but I like the bits of humor about the seven dwarfs.

    You started this off with a couple very descriptive paragraphs, but I think you lost that great description as the story progressed. That's my only criticism. =]

    Thanks for entering and good luck!

    -jj


  • WritersEffigy gold member
    June 19
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    Could be longer

    Needs a bit more detail I think.

    Thanks for entering!


  • Rosemary silver member
    June 17

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    Good story

    I thought you did a good imaginative job with this story. I especially liked the way you paused the story and spoke to the reader. I hope you do well with the contest.


  • Orimis
    June 16

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    Trés bien!

    Okay, so...damn.

    Why? you ask?

    This was very good. Par for the course with you.
    That being said, even without knowing you personally, I could see that this subject was out of your comfort bubble. You get brownie points for trying, surely, but I still see where you could have done better. I understand that this was a "Hey, kid, lemme tell you a story" (I was thinking of those old black & white detective movies the whole time. Bravo.) sort of narrative, but your narrator could have fleshed out the dwarves' characteristics a little more. For sins, they didn't come across to me as very...sinful. Similarly, there's just so much more that you could have done with the killing. Again, though, you could use the narrative style as a reason for your lack of description, and I'd be fine with that.

    I also love that you turned Snow White upside down, but I was almost expecting her to be even darker than you made her. You know, use her victims to their fullest with sexual torture, etc. On that note, don't ever look in my closet.

    In summation, my biggest gripe is the dwarves. I only rated you thusly because I know you can do better. Though I'm not sure whether I hope you do or don't write more stories like this.

    Remind me to treat you extra nice for the rest of forever in case you snap and go Snow White on our asses someday. :]


  • Intrepid
    June 14

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    ~FUCKING LOVED IT ~

    You took my concept and ran with it and It was fucking brilliant..I just wanted to read it over and over again it was delish...

    Especially the seven dwarfs omg omg omg !!!

    Im speechless actually I was not expecting something so creative lol.

    Also I think it is lol (slipknot)

    GOOD LUCK
    THANKS FOR THE ENTRY

    keep writing
    for a first try this was swell

    Blair


  • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
    June 14
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    p1 a favorite of (the) house. - (Their) minds

    p6 back to Snow (White).

    p13 Usually (Happy) likes

    p19 (theorize)


    This is an interesting view of Snow White, but you didn't kill her off. I thought that was part of the contest. Anyway, you certainly made her an evil lady.

    Andy


  • demonp3n
    June 14

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    Wow. This is really different from your usual style. I really liked it. You did a good job on it. Who knows, maybe you should start writing darker stories. JK. I know you won't.

    Anyway, this was really good, and I liked reading it.


    • moonwriter
      June 14
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      this is probably a one time only thing. It was weird to write ,but it was a good challenge.

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