1. In the beginning God created the room and the desk.1
2. Now the desk was formless and empty, darkness was in the empty drawers, and the Spirit of God was hovering over the desk.2
3. And God said, "Let there be light," and he turned on the light.3
4. God saw that the light was good, he could see what he was doing now, and He separated the light from the darkness.4
5. God called the light “day,” and the darkness “night.”
And there was evening, and there was morning, the first day.5
6. And God said, "Let there be a space on the desk to separate one side from the other."6
7. So God made the space on his desk and separated the draw under it from the draw above it. And it was so.7
8. God called the space "spare room, for putting things on."
And there was evening, and there was morning, the second day.8
9. And God said, "Let the water under the desk be gathered to one place, and let dry ground appear." And it was so.9
10. God called the ground "floor," and the gathered waters he called "the aquarium." And God saw that is was good.10
11. Then God said, "let the land produce vegetation: pretty flowering potted-plants and bonsai on the shelves that bear fruit with seed in it, according to their various kinds." And it was so.11
12. The land produced vegetation: potted-plants bearing pretty flowers according to their kinds and bonsai bearing fruit with seed in it according to their kinds. And God saw that it was good.12
13. And there was evening, and there was morning, the third day.13
14. And God said, "Let there be lights in the expanse of the room to separate the day from the night, and let them serve as signs to mark when the light needs changing,14
15. and let there be lights in the expanse of the room to give light on the desk." And it was so.15
16. God made two great lights, the greater light to be on the ceiling and govern the day and the lesser light to sit on the desk and govern the night. He also made the glow-in-the-dark stars.16
17. God set them on the ceiling of the room to look pretty when lying in bed,17
18. to govern the day and the night, and to separate light from darkness. And God saw that it was good.18
19. And there was evening, and there was morning, the fourth day.19
20. And God said, "Let the aquarium teem with goldfish, and let the moths fly above the floor across the expanse of the room."20
21. So God created the great goldfish of the aquarium and every living and moving thing with which the aquariums teem, according to their kinds, and every winged moth according to its kind. And God saw that it was good.21
22. God blessed the fish of the aquarium and said, "Be fruitful and increase in number and fill the aquarium, if you run out of room, I will get you a new aquarium." And God said to the moths, "Blessed are you if you'd only leave me alone and stop flying around my head."22
23. And there was evening, and there was morning, the fifth day.23
24. And God said, "Let the floor produce living creatures according to their kinds: insects, creatures that move along the floor, and spiders, each according to its kind." And it was so.24
25. God made the spiders according to their kinds, the insects according to their kinds, and all the creatures that move along the floor according to their kinds. And God saw that it was good.25
26. Then God said, "Let us make Lego people in our image, in our likeness, and let them rule over the goldfish of the aquariums and the moths of the air, over the insects, over all the room, and over all the creatures that move along the floor."26
27. So God created Lego people in his own image, in the image of God he created him; male and female he created them.27
28. God blessed them and said to them, "Be fruitful and increase in number; fill the room and subdue it. Rule over the goldfish of the aquariums and the moths of the air and over every living creature that moves on the floor.28
29. Then God said, "I give you every pretty flowering potted-plant on the face of the whole room and every bonsai that has fruit with seed in it. They will be yours for food.29
30. And to all the fish of the aquarium and all the moths of the air and all the creatures that move on the floor, everything that has the breath of life in it, I give every bonsai for food." And it was so.30
31. God saw all that he had made, and it was very good. And there was evening, and there was morning, the sixth day.31
32. And God said, "Finally, I have a desk, now I can start designing the universe."
Author notes
I got bored one Saturday afternoon and started thinking up how to write my own version of The Creation. It might make more sense if you read, or have read, the Creation Account from the Bible, Genesis chapter 1.
For contest reasons, I'm a guy.
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Comments
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Interesting
I was very doubtful about this until I read the end. The only reservation I had is that in scripture God the Father was not alone. The angels were already there. There was more than one creating force in God the Father because He said "Let us make Man in our image."
This is very interesting. God speed to you in the contest.
God bless you.
Beth
beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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This was quite interesting and I do agree it would probably help to know the Genesis 1 account. Oddly enough I can sort of see this being used as Sunday school video for kids.
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Lol very funny stuff! xD I liked this parody, it was respectful and still very entertaining. Good job!
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Haha. The end of this definitely made me laugh.
It was a really cute idea, and you did a nie job on it.
I am really glad I read it.
Thank you so much for entering my contest, and I wish you the best of luck!
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Tay
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Um, okay I've never even opened a bible so this made no sence what so ever. I know there were six days then one day rest but that is truely the extent of my knowledge. Being that I know nothing of the bible this made no sence, thus I was unable to compose a proper comment. Thank you for entering my contest, anyway.
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Hah !
I laughed at the end
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*le awesomeness*
Its so funny! I love the whole thing.
I don't care what any one else says, Joshua, this is genius!!
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*laughs* Wow, this was awesome! I love satire, but it takes a rare breed to poke fun at the Bible and do it well.
My favorite parts were number 22, 26, and 32 - they made me giggle quite a lot. Very nicely done, and very much enjoyed by yours truly. 
Good luck in the contest and welcome to the site!
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Isn't me lil bro clever? (Biological brother, not a SW brother). Humour runs in our family (See also The Summoning, by my older brother). We're just so funny.
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Rather clever. I liked that for every earth creation you replaced it with an appropriate approximation for the room - the moths the creatures of the heavens, and so forth. I liked the tongue-in-cheek humour employed - that once 'God' finally had his desk and office done, he could finally turn to the bigger things - like designing the universe.
Good luck in the contest.
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I went through a few human replacements before I settled on Lego people.
I thought of designing his house but I don't think I will try. It probably wouldn't be much different from this.
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Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
Brooke
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A very enjoyable and humorous read. Most definately the creatiion of divine office space. It made me smile as well as consider the possibilities.
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Possibilities? What possibilities?
Glad you enjoyed it anyway.
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That was quite a nice way to start an early Thursday morning. Good job on making me laugh this early (6:39am)!
I love the way you twisted everything around to fit your 'Bible'. I maybe be religious but a joke once in a while like this doesn't hurt, right?
PS: Because there was FOWL play.
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Nice to know I can give someone a nice start to an early morning.
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Hi Joshua,
You certainly have an unusual tale here—
Guess if God was going to create this mess we have, he might as well start with a desk and an empty room
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I enjoyed the way you set that up and the bits of humor you worked in, much better than the bible version.
Welcome to SW and thanks for sharing this with us. I’m certain there is more of the bible waiting to be rewritten.
If you haven’t written it yet, I do hope you do in the near future. This is a good project to work on here
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Thanks for this entry in our contest and good luck.
Geri
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Glad you liked it.
I don't consider it to be better then the Bible version though.
I've kinda thought about doing other parts of the Bible but I can't think of any thing in particular to do yet.
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Interesting
An interesting allusion to the Bible. I'm not sure I'd want all the insects in the room, however. The aquarium sounds nice. I used to have some aquariums. So after creating a desk, God was going to create the Universe. I figured God had to begin somewhere.
Thanks for entering the new member contest. Welcome to Storywrite.
Anmdy
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I don't know that I would want lots of insects in my room too but I had to think of something to substitute the beasts of the fields.
It took me awhile to decide what type of people were to take care of everything.
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lol, very funny. At first I was confused, I didn't understand what or where he was supposed to be creating, but by about half way through I got it and it was great. XD
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