Lira and la monster

There was a loud noise, thunder in other words. Lira was climbing the tree in the dark. The woods had all sorts of noises, most NOT pleasent ones. A downpour was ruining her already-bad night-vision.1

Her heart was thundering. THUMP, thump.....But she climed on higher, for the figure was getting closer near the tree. 2

" Come down....I'll only take a bite... " The monster tried to pursuade. " NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!! " Lira cried. Her hands and legs were working their way up to the top of the high tree. Thump....thump.3

Lira cut her hand on the rough bark. She yelped and felt the blood flowing, but rufused to slip. Climbing higher, the monster still tried to pursuade her to climb down. " Take a bite off someone else! " Lira cried.4

" I want you, because like your smell.... " It hissed. " Smell someone else!! " Lira screamed. She was near the very top. Her hands were slipping on the wer, rough, bark.5

Suddenly, thunder struck the tree. A flash blinded Lira. In the next heartbeat, she felt an acute pain on her side. It took a few seconds for her to realize she was on the ground.6

The monster was already standing near her, grinning. Lira gasped. " Now.....what'll save you now? " The beast stated. Lira started to cry. " Why you so evil?! " Lira chocked out.7

" I am not, evil.....I have to do this. " It said.8

It was indeed a scary monster..........................a vampire. It bared its long, white, sharp fangs. Lira was sobbing histerically. The vampire lifted Lira up.9

She glared at him. Then, the vampire closed in the gap near her neck. Lira felt a two sharp prickles up her neck. Next came an intolerable pain. Groaning, Lira felt blood run down her neck.10

Lira felt weak. Darkness surounded her like a blanket. The vampire kept drinking. Lira felt him soon let go. She soon met with the ground. Then............nothing.11

Author notes

I made the vampire vicious and mean, because he had to be scary. And the girl is innocent, because she is the main character. And....that's all I can say.....

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  • Web Haunting
    June 17, 2008

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    creepiness. what sux is i live almost in the woods (in the adarondacks), and i like to climb trees. T_T now whenever I do, I'm ganna be thinkin' 'bout vampires eating me. Great job!!
    *With Love* ~Wendy Elizabeth~


  • Hismercy
    June 11, 2008
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    finish the unfinished



    You better finish this girl !!!!

    -Hismercy

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • LadyLionnir
    June 11, 2008

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    I like it so far, lol, the thunder and the monster. Perfect mixture of frightening elements and I think I sense a story potential.

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